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« Reply #75 on: October 20, 2004, 04:10:49 pm »
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Ooh!  And is it just me, or is it a change that Tisiphone is now interrogating Jimmy Connors?  I'm very happy. :)


Yes, Megaera originally interrogated Conners. But I wanted her to do Cheney. And Tisiphone didn't have anyone to interrogate. And the
Conners interrogation wasn't wacky enough. Neither is the Cheney
interview, but I was talking with Megaera last night and she kept
getting Dick Cheney confused with Dick Clark and other famous Dicks, so........

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« Reply #76 on: October 20, 2004, 05:13:39 pm »
Heh heh - that explains why she likes hot dogs so much. ;)
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« Reply #77 on: October 20, 2004, 05:56:43 pm »
Well done on the second act!  It's got a great Stoppard/Shepard feel to it.  

I still think there are too many monologues in the 3rd act, 'cuz Taylor's indictment of the audience loses ome of it's punch.

But hell, it's a great piece of work, man.  I'd love to get it done somewhere.

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« Reply #78 on: October 23, 2004, 04:00:00 am »
wow

Eventually, I'll perform this. I have a friend who'd love being a F... Kindly One.
"we are building a religion
we are making a brand
we're the only ones to turn to when your castles turn to sand
take a bite of this apple
mister corporate events
take a walk through the jungle
of cardboard shanties and tents
some people drink pepsi
some people drink coke
the wacky morning dj says democracy's a joke
he says now do you believe in the one big song
he is now accepting callers who would like to sing along"


I AM A COMPLETE AND UTTER FUCKING IDIOT!

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« Reply #79 on: October 26, 2004, 02:25:49 pm »
Gnimbley,

I saw this comic recently and it made me think of your play - both Cheney's and Taylor's rants:

http://www.catandgirl.com/view.php?loc=214
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« Reply #80 on: October 29, 2004, 02:15:00 am »
I just reread the two Act IIs. While I was reading the first one I
thought that I should stick with that one (and just do a rewrite.)
And then I read the second one and I liked that one a lot, too.

I like the Eris (rational witch neighbor) character in the first one.
And I like the fact that the ending makes more sense with this
act II.

I like the political humor in the second. And while the first half
of the scene is clunky, it moves along fairly well after that. And
I like how characters and their identities change when Taylor
enters and exits.

So, what do you think? Should I base the rewrite on the first
version (where George is a bond salesman) or on the second
(where he is the President)?

What's a gnome to do? Oh, bother, bother, bother.

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« Reply #81 on: October 29, 2004, 02:22:49 am »
I liked the second one. But I haven't read the first.
"we are building a religion
we are making a brand
we're the only ones to turn to when your castles turn to sand
take a bite of this apple
mister corporate events
take a walk through the jungle
of cardboard shanties and tents
some people drink pepsi
some people drink coke
the wacky morning dj says democracy's a joke
he says now do you believe in the one big song
he is now accepting callers who would like to sing along"


I AM A COMPLETE AND UTTER FUCKING IDIOT!

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« Reply #82 on: October 29, 2004, 02:55:14 am »
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I liked the second one. But I haven't read the first.


In Scene II of the current play, he's a bond salesman.
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« Reply #83 on: October 29, 2004, 03:07:35 am »
The current version on the internet GWB is BOTH, and Eris is a secret
service agent. In the previous version she was the neighbor. In the
current version she is also a Century 21 real estate agent. In the first
version she wasn't. Confused?

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« Reply #84 on: October 29, 2004, 04:11:50 am »
Okay, for those of you who want to compare the two versions side by
side, here they are:

http://home.earthlink.net/~cscooper/Act2Version1.pdf

http://home.earthlink.net/~cscooper/Act2Version2.pdf

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« Reply #85 on: October 29, 2004, 05:05:10 am »
I like the first version too...
I don't envy you the choice. Or the people who'll yell about it.
"we are building a religion
we are making a brand
we're the only ones to turn to when your castles turn to sand
take a bite of this apple
mister corporate events
take a walk through the jungle
of cardboard shanties and tents
some people drink pepsi
some people drink coke
the wacky morning dj says democracy's a joke
he says now do you believe in the one big song
he is now accepting callers who would like to sing along"


I AM A COMPLETE AND UTTER FUCKING IDIOT!

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« Reply #86 on: October 29, 2004, 04:21:02 pm »
I like the second, with reality switching every time Taylor comes it & leaves.  Could you make it a 3-way reality shift, and be able to include the good bits of the first version?

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« Reply #87 on: October 29, 2004, 06:04:48 pm »
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I like the second, with reality switching every time Taylor comes it & leaves.  Could you make it a 3-way reality shift, and be able to include the good bits of the first version?


Which are the good bits?

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« Reply #88 on: October 29, 2004, 09:36:36 pm »
The second version makes less sense to me, which means it's probably the better choice for an "Erisian mystery".

Staging it with the first version, you have act 1 where George is the President, act 2 where he's some average schmoe, and act 3 where it doesn't matter which he is - he (along with everyone else) bears a share of the guilt for the way things are in the world today.

Staging it with the second version, the impression is more that he is the President, with occasional delusions that he isn't, and those happen and end quickly enough that the audience is probably not going to be able to process the idea as thoroughly as they would with the first version.

So... version 1 boosts the condemnation, and version 2 boosts the confusion.

Or...you know. :D
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« Reply #89 on: January 14, 2005, 05:17:06 pm »
/me slips a batch of chocolate-chip cookies under the script.
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