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Re: Godsmancer
« Reply #15 on: September 19, 2012, 07:24:05 pm »
Fucking excellent!

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“I’m guessing it was January 2007, a meeting in Bethesda, we got a bag of bees and just started smashing them on the desk,” Charles Wick said. “It was very complicated.”

“People get used to anything. The less you think about your oppression, the more your tolerance for it grows. After a while, people just think oppression is the normal state of things. But to become free, you have to be acutely aware of being a slave.”
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Re: Godsmancer
« Reply #16 on: September 20, 2012, 01:42:12 am »
This is awesome!
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Re: Godsmancer
« Reply #17 on: September 20, 2012, 08:43:27 am »
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« Last Edit: December 22, 2012, 12:07:44 pm by Placid Dingo »
If sheep entrails could in any way be related to the weather, i.e. sheep trails only originate where it rains, then you could use it as an accurate model for discerning what the weathers going to be like. Either, sheep shit makes it rain, or raining makes sheep shit. Sheep don't shit "randomly" sheep shit after they eat, it doesn't rain "randomly" it rains after water collects in the atmosphere.

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Re: Godsmancer
« Reply #18 on: September 20, 2012, 12:33:43 pm »
I don't quite understand. Eating his own heart reanimated his corpse?
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« Reply #19 on: September 20, 2012, 01:04:21 pm »
I don't quite understand. Eating his own heart reanimated his corpse?

That's not meant to be the implication. At this point it shouldn't be clear what's going on exactly with Clay, but it's going to tie in with his personal backstory. I was going to put in another sequence following Arvin's plotline and then another with Katy to try to throw in a quick info-dump about the reasons for the reanimation, etc.
If sheep entrails could in any way be related to the weather, i.e. sheep trails only originate where it rains, then you could use it as an accurate model for discerning what the weathers going to be like. Either, sheep shit makes it rain, or raining makes sheep shit. Sheep don't shit "randomly" sheep shit after they eat, it doesn't rain "randomly" it rains after water collects in the atmosphere.

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« Reply #20 on: September 20, 2012, 03:20:29 pm »
Dude, that was that stuff right there! The kind of stuff you can't get off the shelf.
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« Reply #21 on: September 20, 2012, 03:25:05 pm »
Fuckin' A.
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« Reply #22 on: September 21, 2012, 01:08:04 am »
I don't quite understand. Eating his own heart reanimated his corpse?

That's not meant to be the implication. At this point it shouldn't be clear what's going on exactly with Clay, but it's going to tie in with his personal backstory. I was going to put in another sequence following Arvin's plotline and then another with Katy to try to throw in a quick info-dump about the reasons for the reanimation, etc.

Ah. I'm going to quit asking questions and just read these updates. You're good at this.
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« Reply #23 on: September 21, 2012, 03:13:07 am »
I don't quite understand. Eating his own heart reanimated his corpse?

That's not meant to be the implication. At this point it shouldn't be clear what's going on exactly with Clay, but it's going to tie in with his personal backstory. I was going to put in another sequence following Arvin's plotline and then another with Katy to try to throw in a quick info-dump about the reasons for the reanimation, etc.

Ah. I'm going to quit asking questions and just read these updates. You're good at this.

Youre welcome to ask away as you wish. If something's not meant to be clear yet I'll just say so
If sheep entrails could in any way be related to the weather, i.e. sheep trails only originate where it rains, then you could use it as an accurate model for discerning what the weathers going to be like. Either, sheep shit makes it rain, or raining makes sheep shit. Sheep don't shit "randomly" sheep shit after they eat, it doesn't rain "randomly" it rains after water collects in the atmosphere.

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« Reply #24 on: September 22, 2012, 05:40:22 am »
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If sheep entrails could in any way be related to the weather, i.e. sheep trails only originate where it rains, then you could use it as an accurate model for discerning what the weathers going to be like. Either, sheep shit makes it rain, or raining makes sheep shit. Sheep don't shit "randomly" sheep shit after they eat, it doesn't rain "randomly" it rains after water collects in the atmosphere.

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Re: Godsmancer
« Reply #25 on: October 14, 2012, 02:18:59 pm »
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If sheep entrails could in any way be related to the weather, i.e. sheep trails only originate where it rains, then you could use it as an accurate model for discerning what the weathers going to be like. Either, sheep shit makes it rain, or raining makes sheep shit. Sheep don't shit "randomly" sheep shit after they eat, it doesn't rain "randomly" it rains after water collects in the atmosphere.

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Re: Godsmancer
« Reply #26 on: October 15, 2012, 01:20:04 am »
That was well worth the wait. Please let there be more soon.
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Re: Godsmancer
« Reply #27 on: October 15, 2012, 02:56:54 am »
What Kai said. This story is great!
“I’m guessing it was January 2007, a meeting in Bethesda, we got a bag of bees and just started smashing them on the desk,” Charles Wick said. “It was very complicated.”

“People get used to anything. The less you think about your oppression, the more your tolerance for it grows. After a while, people just think oppression is the normal state of things. But to become free, you have to be acutely aware of being a slave.”
― Assata Shaku

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« Reply #28 on: October 15, 2012, 01:50:23 pm »
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If sheep entrails could in any way be related to the weather, i.e. sheep trails only originate where it rains, then you could use it as an accurate model for discerning what the weathers going to be like. Either, sheep shit makes it rain, or raining makes sheep shit. Sheep don't shit "randomly" sheep shit after they eat, it doesn't rain "randomly" it rains after water collects in the atmosphere.

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Re: Godsmancer
« Reply #29 on: October 17, 2012, 11:09:08 pm »
I really like your character development. Excellent writing!
“I’m guessing it was January 2007, a meeting in Bethesda, we got a bag of bees and just started smashing them on the desk,” Charles Wick said. “It was very complicated.”

“People get used to anything. The less you think about your oppression, the more your tolerance for it grows. After a while, people just think oppression is the normal state of things. But to become free, you have to be acutely aware of being a slave.”
― Assata Shaku