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Hmm, interesting. When I get home, I'll go through and suggested some edits, but I'd like to see you keep going until then if you have the material.
Quote from: Secret Agent GARBO on July 31, 2012, 04:57:28 PM
Hmm, interesting. When I get home, I'll go through and suggested some edits, but I'd like to see you keep going until then if you have the material.
Thanks. The quality of the writing is sketchy at best right now but I'm open to any feedback.
You don't know me, but I'm enjoying this, it's very captivating. I think people will have no problem relating to this near-future. The theme of the setting feels important and relevant. Maybe the first two paragraphs could do with a make-over, they seem to me to be of a lower order of quality than the rest of it. I'd like to read more
Thanks Moe.
I haven't really had time to read it, but at some point I will.
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