Principia Discordia

Principia Discordia => Two vast and trunkless legs of stone => Topic started by: Payne on May 08, 2011, 09:43:13 PM

Title: I present to y'all a teaser...
Post by: Payne on May 08, 2011, 09:43:13 PM
...of what I've been working on the last little while, the Holy ScriptureTM Roger wanted me to compose after my Holy QuestTM. The idea for this came to me during my caffeine and other substances withdrawl. I've been shaping the idea ever since and today I wrote down the first lines (which will most assuredly be edited all to fuck in time).

So here it is, the first bit of part one (the Proem in the genres parlance).



   I ask, oh muse, you sing of Lexakles
   the Blueshifter and belov'd of Eris.
   Brought to Illiam by Discordia
   who laid 'pon him proud elucidation
   as in his heart he knew not who he loved.
   Speak then of him coming near from afar,
   of great conflict and destinied balance.
   Tell of the trials he tested, triumph
   in Trojan, Greek and in Eris' name
   so doing in wearing glory and fame,
   to stand before bittered foes, Lexakles!
   Jester to a king who hath not a throne -
   Become grave man of great spirit a'fire,
   Builder and razer, poet'cal liar,
   A warrior skilled, strifing discord blows,
   Final to trickster whom contention sows.
   All this, and more did The Blushifter wring,
   to sing of his song is life to my lyre.
   When all glory is dead and heroes, gone,
   lord Lexakles will be gold gainst our brass.
   In balance, in truth, in beauty withal
   conquering madness, deceiving the fall
   of humans who know not the truth most foul.



I intend to continue working on this as and when I can, and further parts will probably be thrown down in literate chaotic.
Title: Re: I present to y'all a teaser...
Post by: Cardinal Pizza Deliverance. on May 08, 2011, 09:47:01 PM
Wow. I had not realized you were so poetic. This is so kick ass.
Title: Re: I present to y'all a teaser...
Post by: Payne on May 08, 2011, 09:48:09 PM
I cannot PROPERLY Iambic Pentameter, but at least every line is ten syllables :D
Title: Re: I present to y'all a teaser...
Post by: Cardinal Pizza Deliverance. on May 08, 2011, 09:49:51 PM
No one can properly iambic pentameter. Not even the bastards who thought it up. My attempts at sonnets . . . unless the subject is so simplistic as to consist of three letter words . . . are abominations in the eyes of poetry. I like this. It makes me want to go back to hacking away at sonnets again. Only without so much SeriousTM and a lot more fun, instead.

I also want more of the story.
Title: Re: I present to y'all a teaser...
Post by: Payne on May 09, 2011, 06:35:56 PM
Anyone else have any thoughts or suggestions?
Title: Re: I present to y'all a teaser...
Post by: Rumckle on May 10, 2011, 08:46:15 AM
 :lol:
Awesome!

And as CPD said, don't worry about not having perfect iambic pentameter.
Title: Re: I present to y'all a teaser...
Post by: The Good Reverend Roger on May 10, 2011, 05:47:53 PM
Nice.
Title: Re: I present to y'all a teaser...
Post by: The Good Reverend Roger on May 10, 2011, 05:48:22 PM
Quote from: Rumckle on May 10, 2011, 08:46:15 AM
And as CPD said, don't worry about not having perfect iambic pentameter.

Isn't that stuff illegal in England?
Title: Re: I present to y'all a teaser...
Post by: Luna on May 10, 2011, 06:31:38 PM
Good stuff!