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Started by Q. G. Pennyworth, October 07, 2014, 01:46:00 PM

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Q. G. Pennyworth

Ten years on and you're the one I didn't manage to get
And you still have an unredeemed free admission in my pants
I know it'll never happen, since it hasn't happened yet
But that voucher's not expired, should you change your mind by chance.

I kinda hate your girlfriend, and I kinda hate your life
But if you wanted to bump uglies I'd ignore it for a night
I won't drop all I have here and I'll never be your wife
It's just an itch that only getting naked will set right.

I try not to bring it up much, since the entire thing is moot
You made yourself quite clear where those lines were to be drawn
No one wants to hear they're still someone's forbidden fruit
So I did my best to eat my pride, ignore you, and move on.

I don't know why you turned me down when I was young and cute
Being a total nutbag could have contributed, maybe
You were probably quite sensible to politely refuse
But despite advice lots of guys still stick their dicks in the crazy.

It doesn't keep me up at night or bring me any pain
I know by now you'll probably never give me a second glance
There's nothing to worry about, I won't bug you again
Just so you know, you still have a free admission in my pants.

Q. G. Pennyworth

Second stanza = only good stanza, but at least I finished it.

Junkenstein

Ouch.

Know that feeling, excellently written and conveyed.
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Reginald Ret

Quite thought provoking, I find it recognizable and alien at the same time.
I recognize the irrational willingness and your response to that.
I don't understand the underlying assumption that you are wanted, I'm not sure if that is an insecurity thing on my part or a difference in how sexuality is treated by western culture for each gender.
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Q. G. Pennyworth

Quote from: Ragret on October 09, 2014, 08:56:27 PM
Quite thought provoking, I find it recognizable and alien at the same time.
I recognize the irrational willingness and your response to that.
I don't understand the underlying assumption that you are wanted, I'm not sure if that is an insecurity thing on my part or a difference in how sexuality is treated by western culture for each gender.

I think gender has a lot to do with it. There's some additional crap that is specific to the person it's addressed to, but I am very specifically operating out of a place of privilege being a pretty girl in this case.

Mesozoic Mister Nigel

Also, I have to admire anyone who can incorporate the word "pants" into poetry and make it work.
"I'm guessing it was January 2007, a meeting in Bethesda, we got a bag of bees and just started smashing them on the desk," Charles Wick said. "It was very complicated."


trix

Interesting poem.  Unusual, entertaining, touchingly personal.

I like.


Quote from: Your Mom on October 10, 2014, 03:39:04 AM
Also, I have to admire anyone who can incorporate the word "pants" into poetry and make it work.

I love to go on rants,
when alone, I love to dance,
or when I forget to wear a belt
and don't want to lose my pance.


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