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Principia Discordia => Bring and Brag => Topic started by: zackli on August 22, 2014, 03:52:50 am

Title: Hunting Bigfoot
Post by: zackli on August 22, 2014, 03:52:50 am
Poem I wrote, with intent to turn it into a song if some nasty thief doesn't come take my obviously already gone dreams of fame/stardom/wealth.


On patrol, just another day
when a baby bigfoot comes out to play
watching, waiting to hear
what it has to say

"You have nothing to fear"
Just what I wanted to hear
gun raised, fired and aimed
fucking hell, got blood in my beer

On patrol, just another day
When a teenage bigfoot gets in my way
watching, waiting to see
if and what it has to say

"Look behind that tree
You will find all that you seek"
gun raised, aimed and ...
"It's all just for fun, and I'm on a streak"

On patrol, just another day
When a ripe old bigfoot enters the fray
watching, ready to deal
with all of the theatrics, without delay

I know how you feel
and on that day, both of their lives, their fates were sealed
gun raised, aimed and ...
It's tough not knowing what is real

If anyone wants to interpret it, feel free. It would be interesting to see how its perception being created and its perception being read are similar and different. Or you can tell me it sucks. That's cool too.
Title: Re: Hunting Bigfoot
Post by: Q. G. Pennyworth on August 22, 2014, 06:48:28 am
I'm leaning toward "sucks" but I could be wrong. The meter is very irregular.
Title: Re: Hunting Bigfoot
Post by: Raz Tech on August 22, 2014, 12:52:28 pm
It strikes me as inconsistent.

Guessing it's supposed to be about gun violence, but perhaps I'm a little biased by recent events.

I think you need to rewrite it once or twice or three times.
Title: Re: Hunting Bigfoot
Post by: zackli on August 25, 2014, 01:49:39 am
It strikes me as inconsistent.

Guessing it's supposed to be about gun violence, but perhaps I'm a little biased by recent events.

I think you need to rewrite it once or twice or three times.

It's not very consistent, it's not supposed to be about gun violence, and I probably should re-write it once or twice and three more times :)
Title: Re: Hunting Bigfoot
Post by: Mesozoic Mister Nigel on August 25, 2014, 09:31:14 am
As a singer, I think it has potential as a song. I heard it as a commentary on border violence, interested in how it was meant.
Title: Re: Hunting Bigfoot
Post by: Raz Tech on August 25, 2014, 11:42:24 pm
As a singer, I think it has potential as a song. I heard it as a commentary on border violence, interested in how it was meant.

Now I can't get the idea out of my head that this would make a pretty decent wonky stop-time blues piece.  A bit of loose play with the words and a simple chorus would make it doable.
Title: Re: Hunting Bigfoot
Post by: Bobby Campbell on September 03, 2014, 03:22:45 pm
I think it has a really nice jangle to it!

It doesn't seem immediately reducible to a specific metaphor to me, which is good because it doesn't put a cap on its interpretative applications.

The last line makes it for me "It's tough not knowing what is real"  :fnord: