I'm a bad consumer...

[Cramulus]

here's piece I wrote... I'm not overly fond of the meter, but it was one of those things I could only get out of my head by writing down. So here it is.




I'm a bad consumer
culturally irrelevant
mind is full of tigers
and ideas so malevolent

I hate my stupid wallet
the cards inside aren't part of me
there's bile in my gullet
and economic anatomy

  protest, protest
  and shake your fist
  grab your stuff and
  pull and twist

  grab the future
  have a tryst
  protest, protest
  and shake your fist

at this rusty rotten spectacle
this sad retracted testicle
this sagging sappy vegetable
his inertia is invincible

I'll raise the fever, give 'em hell
Instead of watching, now I'll yell
Disconnect them, break the spell
(but I'm the jailor AND the cell)

  riot, riot
  revolution
  fire is
  the absolution

  pollute the air
  with unpollution
  riot, riot
  revolution

I won't be a culture-shill
I changed my life from gray to red
I'll reverse the values they instill
and do the opposite instead

I'm full of death, I'm full of fight
I'm smoking wrong and burning bright
I'll sacrifice myself tonight
so life is better now... right?

  rebel, rebel
  and shake your crown
  build a bridge and
  burn it down

  stake your cross
  into the ground
  rebel, rebel
  shake your crown

I knocked the products off my shelf
and now the shelves are empty
I should have rebelled against myself
that tyrant has consumed me

nobody heard, no one awoke
like driftwood in the sea
they chose their role in this sick joke
their punchline punches me

  wake up, wake up
  'cause you should know
  that if you hate it,
  let it go

  and if you love it,
  time to go -
  wake up, wake up
  for the nine to five show

[AFK]

I like it.  It sounds like something that needs to be performed somehow, whether through song or just a verbal rant.  The meter is a little weird in a couple of places but not so much that it ruins the flow.  Good stuff!   

[Cramulus]

thanks. Yeah at some point I'm going to write some music for it and record it - but for now it needs to brew a bit more. Gotta tighten up a few of the stanzas. And something about an ABAB rhyming scheme smells like doggerel without music. It should be clear, but the frustration expressed in this piece is very much a part of my "Sicker and Sicker" rant.

[Phineas T. Poxwattle]

first draft

http://ifile.it/agwy57d

note that I am not a professional!

[Richter]

Will have to listen later. 

I like the lyrics though, but my brain keeping setting it to "I love my computer" by Bad Religion.

[AFK]

It has a Butthole Surfers ala "Pepper" quality to it. 

[Mesozoic Mister Nigel]

I really like it! Would like the vocals to be a little louder and crisper.

Ludwig blurted out "That's very good for Cramulus!" and I am not sure what she means by that, except that perhaps she did not expect a man with a moustache to have such good rhythm.

[Richter]

That comes across well done though.  Clean delivery and GOOD voice.

I snarfed hot curry at the dragon testicle line.

[Phineas T. Poxwattle]

take two - much cleaner, changed the lyrics:

http://ifile.it/b6dp9rx

[Pariah]

A thousands mittens to you sir.

[Triple Zero]

AWESOME CRAM!!!

great industrial sound! the mechanical beats remind me of old Front 242 a lot. somehow your voice in this track also reminds me of Covenant a bit, which is odd because they're Danish (afaik) and should therefore have a Dutch accent

and the homegrown distorted vocal sound, KOMPRESSOR couldn't have done it better.

try a fake German accent next time, just for the hell of it!

[Pariah]

but I'm the jailor AND the cell

I think think it should stay "I'm" instead of "They're" in the song atleast.