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The Cleansing
« on: January 17, 2009, 08:24:54 am »
Lots of rhyming going on, yo? Don't know if this is really my style any more, but I used to write shit like this all the time a few years back.

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Who's manning up to man the defences?
The patriot called, now come to his senses?
The bomb maimed your pride, now it mains you,
The fight that you sought, isn't the one that you're in,
It's Dirty. It's a Dirty old fight, It's Dirty.

Who's paying the fines for fucked up finances?
It isn't that banker, bailed out, "good intentions".
The shit hit the fan, now it hits you,
Staining your beautiful and hard earned suit,
It's Dirty. It's a Dirty new suit. It's Dirty.

Oh for a world that was clean, oh for a world that was clear,
For a world that, for you, held none of your fears,
The answer is simple, or so we are told,
It's repeated until our dreams are bought and are sold,
To make the world simple, to make our suits clean,
We have to get our hands Dirty.
We replace the stains with dirt that's unseen,
We have to get our hands Dirty.

Who watches the men who are watching us?
Who watches them? Are they watching themselves?
Your reflection of fear now reflects you,
But at least you can see what never was there,
It's Dirty. It's a Dirty new vision, It's Dirty.

Oh for a world that was sane, oh for a world that made sense,
For a world that, for you, held no more pretence,
The questions are scripted, the vision is bold,
A lie, oft repeated, becomes plated with gold,
To create a world in our image, to wipe the slate clean,
We have to get our hands Dirty.
We replace the stains with dirt that's unseen,
We have to get our hands Dirty.
To make the world simple, to make our suits clean,
We have to get our hands Dirty.
We have to get our hands Dirty.

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Re: The Cleansing
« Reply #1 on: January 17, 2009, 04:46:55 pm »
I like this, although I can't stop imagining it as though Shane MacGowan were singing.
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Re: The Cleansing
« Reply #2 on: January 17, 2009, 04:48:24 pm »
I know, I thought the same after I was done and it kinda sucks.

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Re: The Cleansing
« Reply #3 on: January 17, 2009, 06:15:07 pm »
the hell it does.

I fucking love the Pogues.
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Re: The Cleansing
« Reply #4 on: January 18, 2009, 11:00:02 am »
So do I, but I would have preferred it if this had come across as me instead of MacGowan.


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Re: The Cleansing
« Reply #5 on: January 18, 2009, 05:03:31 pm »
I'm just hearing Payne's voice in my head saying "It's dirty, it's dirty, it's dirty" over and over again.  :fap: :fap: :fap:
“I’m guessing it was January 2007, a meeting in Bethesda, we got a bag of bees and just started smashing them on the desk,” Charles Wick said. “It was very complicated.”


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Re: The Cleansing
« Reply #6 on: January 19, 2009, 12:59:23 am »
But it really is!

well....

You are anyway....

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Re: The Cleansing
« Reply #7 on: January 19, 2009, 03:20:07 am »
But it really is!

well....

You are anyway....

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True, that.  :lulz:
“I’m guessing it was January 2007, a meeting in Bethesda, we got a bag of bees and just started smashing them on the desk,” Charles Wick said. “It was very complicated.”


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Re: The Cleansing
« Reply #8 on: January 20, 2009, 03:54:12 pm »
If I remember, I may write some music to go with this, if you don't mind.

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Re: The Cleansing
« Reply #9 on: January 20, 2009, 03:56:28 pm »
Do what so ever you like with it, Alphapance.

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Re: The Cleansing
« Reply #10 on: January 20, 2009, 07:21:08 pm »
I may change a line or two to fit the meter/rhyme scheme I was thinking of, but I think the intent will be the same.

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Re: The Cleansing
« Reply #11 on: January 21, 2009, 04:42:10 pm »
Update: Melody/vocals complete, basic rhythm tracks need tweaking, need to fill out chords.  End of week/beginning of next week for first draft.

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Re: The Cleansing
« Reply #12 on: January 24, 2009, 02:20:59 pm »
Swote.

I look forward to it.

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Re: The Cleansing
« Reply #13 on: January 26, 2009, 03:10:37 pm »
Just need to nail down 8 more bars of guitar, and some keyboard tweaking.


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« Reply #14 on: January 26, 2009, 06:25:38 pm »
In whatever way seems most appropriate to you.

You should probably err on the side of giving yourself too much credit and me not enough though, I promise not to be offended if you credit me with 2pt. Arial.  :lol: