Plant your dreams.

[Roaring Biscuit!]

This is almost really, really good.  It gets a little too distracted by the cliche of clouds having a silver lining.  Also, I am not sure whether the opening and closing line is necessary.  I guess I'd say focus more on the process, and let it grow organically instead of stumbling around cliches like some kind of minefield.

silver clouds with a dark lining in this iteration. but I see your point.  I think it could probably be fixed by removing some of the "silver"s, i did go a bit overboard

[Brotep]

Yeah, you're not using the cliche, but you're using a twist on the cliche.  I found it distracted from the content of the piece, that's all.


Dreams as "delicate strands of silver light" is nice.  I guess I would ask more about what is being planted, and what grows from it.
A dream growing into a silver tree, makes sense...Or maybe the dreams intertwining to form the tree.


Never mind what I said about the intro and outtro before--they're cool.