PD: The Movie: First Draft completed!

[Placid Dingo]

In this instance, it's the same as "pause".  It means that there is a brief break in the dialoge.  Can often be used comedically, or dramatically.

For example, a CSI: Miami eposide will look like this if written:

COP: Yeah, so we found the skull about twenty yards up the road from the body.

HORATIO CAINE: I guess he got *BEAT* ahead of himself.

(YEEEEAAAAAHHHH!)



Often it also could signify a blank stare, or a confused look.

Thanks for articulating it MUCH better than I did.

[Bebek Sincap Ratatosk]

RATATOST? 

[Placid Dingo]

Yeah, hope that's ok.

I'm going to check one on one with people before i finalise and CC it all. (plus add a note about there being personality rights issues in place as well as copyright restrictions)

Edit; Wait i see the issue. Oops. Have fixed it.

[Triple Zero]

In this instance, it's the same as "pause".  It means that there is a brief break in the dialoge.  Can often be used comedically, or dramatically.

For example, a CSI: Miami eposide will look like this if written:

COP: Yeah, so we found the skull about twenty yards up the road from the body.

HORATIO CAINE: I guess he got *BEAT* ahead of himself.

(YEEEEAAAAAHHHH!)



Often it also could signify a blank stare, or a confused look.

Thanks for articulating it MUCH better than I did.

Yeah ok I get it now, also because the first instance it appeared was with an pun, I expected it to be an actual beat, like , but that became less and less likely as the story continued. Unless, for some reason, the soundtrack to the movie was going to consist entirely out of single percussion hits.

[Placid Dingo]

Another minor rewrite of Nigel's opening monologue. I've added in some stuff to give people a super-basic 'what are discordians' definition, and added some terminology that i want to refer back to in one of the final scenes.


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Nigel (V.O): It never should have been this way. It began with the regulation of the Internet, the public mockery of dissident opinions. Tribes were turned on each other. Birthers. La Rouchans. Objectivists. Every minority who dared question the dominant paradigm was turned on the others. 'The Freak Wars' they called it. Furries and Socialists dolled up like Crips and Bloods. They said we were dangerous. And then we were dangerous. And then we disappeared into the jails. And then we just disappeared. The raids began, and anything that represented creativity, disorder or critical thinking was taken and destroyed. We are the Discordians, the embracers of disorder. And we are the last of our tribe.

[Placid Dingo]

This was a hard sequence to write; it overlaps the ECH and DR JAMES plots which kind of mirror each-other atm.


SCENE THIRTEEN.

We cut between two scenes; DR JAMES SEMAJ and co in his library, and ECH and co in the files room. Dark dramatic music plays, slowly increasing in urgency.

ECH presses a button on the computer.

ECH: Here we go. The pterodactyl handler...

CUT TO DR JAMES

Dr James: ...first heard of about five years ago when a spate of pterodactyl related killings were uncovered in convenience stores around the world.

CUT TO ECH

ECH: No name, no numbers. Nobody's seen his face.

CUT TO DR JAMES

Dr James: He wears a mask and a cloak. Has a hunched back.

CUT TO ECH

ECH: Believed to have links with a corrupt genetic engineer called Kai Von Trock...

CUT TO DR JAMES

Dr James: ...has been linked to an assassin called Mistress Freaky...

CUT TO ECH

ECH: Robbed a bank...

CUT TO DR JAMES

Dr James: ...burned down a supermarket...

CUT TO ECH

ECH: ...bombed a funpark...

CUT TO DR JAMES

Dr James: ...kicked a puppy.

CUT TO a shot of a scary black vehicle driving down the road.

ECH (V.O): That's all we've got. It's not much. Let's have another look through the files. At least now we know what we're looking for.

CUT TO shot of another large vehicle. MISTRESS FREEKY drives, with CAIN, face still hidden, sits beside her.

Dr James (V.O): I don't know if there's much more I can help you with.

CUT TO DR JAMES and the others gathered around a table.

Squid: Why us? Why now.

CUT TO  ECH, PAYNE, 000, NIGEL searching through files.

Dr James (V.O): Maybe because of what we are. Because we're free, and they need to utilise that.

PAYNE'S phone buzzes.

Dr James (V.O): Or destroy it.

PAYNE walks off, answers his phone.

Payne: What do you have?

The voice belongs to BADGE.

Badge: Pterodactyl handler has received funding from a secret government organisation called the Institute of Scientific Advancement, working on secret, illegal...

CUT TO NIGEL, hiding. She is holding her finger to an earpiece; she is clearly intercepting PAYNE'S call.

Badge: ...experiments and technological advancements. There's one name from the institute that owns a major share in Frond.co...

CUT TO 000, also hiding, also listening in.

Badge: ...Charles St Ramulus.

Cut to PAYNE. He is uneasy; the name sounds familiar.

Payne: Can I get a visual?

The screen splits into four; PAYNE, NIGEL, 000 and PAYNE'S phone. There's three quiet beeps; they've all received the message. On the screen of the phone is an image that is obviously CRAM minus pipe and moustache.

Payne; Nigel; 000: Fuck.

CUT TO the scary black car pulling up outside the building where ECH works.

CUT TO CAIN and FREEKY outside their car, at DR JAMES'S place.

CUT TO 000 storming through the files. He sees PAYNE and points.

000: You! You're under arrest. (Nigel comes closer, he points at her too) And you! This...

CUT TO FREEKY, CAIN and MOOKS at DR JAMES'S house. FREEKY opens the door. TWID sees her, gives a small not and steps out of the way.

000 (V.O) (Cont.) : isn't a conspiracy against Discordians, it's a goddamn Discordian conspiracy!

CUT TO the file room. ECH looks confused.

ECH: Did I miss something?

Nigel: Trip, can I have a word? In private?

000: As soon as I have you cuffed.

Nigel: You can't arrest me.

000: Why not?

Nigel (quetly): I'd like to tell you privately.

CUT TO DR JAMES and the other Discordians. As they sit, talking the room is suddenly filled with armed MOOKS. SUU, SQUID, RICHTER and LMNO stand quickly, ready for battle. DR JAMES remains seated, though worried. FREEKY and CAIN move through also and stand in front to address the others.

Dr James: What have you done to Twid?

Freeky: The worst thing that can be done to a man.

Dr James: What have you done?

Freeky: (Grins broadly) Gave him lots of money.

The music reaches it's high point and stops abruptly.

[Hoser McRhizzy]

I hope you keep this.  Love the timing.

PAYNE walks off, answers his phone.

Payne: What do you have?

The voice belongs to BADGE.

Badge: Pterodactyl handler has received funding from a secret government organisation called the Institute of Scientific Advancement, working on secret, illegal...

CUT TO NIGEL, hiding. She is holding her finger to an earpiece; she is clearly intercepting PAYNE'S call.

Badge: ...experiments and technological advancements. There's one name from the institute that owns a major share in Frond.co...

CUT TO 000, also hiding, also listening in.

Badge: ...Charles St Ramulus.

Cut to PAYNE. He is uneasy; the name sounds familiar.

Payne: Can I get a visual?

The screen splits into four; PAYNE, NIGEL, 000 and PAYNE'S phone. There's three quiet beeps; they've all received the message. On the screen of the phone is an image that is obviously CRAM minus pipe and moustache.

Payne; Nigel; 000: Fuck.

[Nephew Twiddleton]

Ka-ching!

I request that now that I have loads of money, you cut to scenes of me in various places, at first looking like I'm on vacation (I'm picturing something involving a Hawaiian shirt and a coconut with a straw and a hat in it), but gradually getting more an more suggestive of clandestine actions and meetings that are plot related.

edit- not a montage of cuts, but sprinkled throughout, with some overlap with other scenes.

[The Wizard]

Dammit, this is why you never hire a Doktor as a butler. Well, at least this puts me in a situation where I can unleash two fisted, two gunned, pulp action!

[Nephew Twiddleton]

Yeah, you were relying on me too much as it was.

You also bring up an interesting point. As a Doktor, one of the scenes should be me playing golf in Scotland with someone, the real purpose of which should be acquiring documents or some other sort of item.

[Placid Dingo]

Dr James gets some old style pulp action very soon.

And Twid, I'll see how we go, there's a lot to get through so i might look at the finished product and see if that can be fit in.  

Also loving all the pulp references; I'm sensing another project after this one.

[President Television]

Can I be a mook? Maybe a mauve shirt if I actually develop a personality.

[Nephew Twiddleton]

Dr James gets some old style pulp action very soon.

And Twid, I'll see how we go, there's a lot to get through so i might look at the finished product and see if that can be fit in.  

Also loving all the pulp references; I'm sensing another project after this one.

No worries, as long as I get to do something cool 

[The Wizard]

Also loving all the pulp references; I'm sensing another project after this one.

Have you checked out PulpGASM?

[Placid Dingo]

Yeah, I had a plan you you popping up 'somewhere' again Twid, but I don't have a clear idea of it yet.

And yeah James, I love the pulpGASM project; i was thinking of a project based on that. But this should be keeping me occupied for a while yet,.

And if I find a mook who lives long enough to be worth naming, it's all yours Dr Plague.






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SCENE FOURTEEN

The files office. Everyone is still standing around awkwardly. PAYNE steps forward.

Payne: (Facing Nigel) That's OK Trip. I think I know why she needs to tell you in private. It's because you're not the only one tracing my calls. Nigel's secret service too. She didn't want to tell you in front of me because then I'd know she was responsible for the raids on the para-politics meetings. And that's she's the reason Adriana is now in hiding.

000: Do you really expect me to...

Nigel: You have to believe me, I never knew about the raids. They never told us what was going to happen.

Payne: We told you what was happening.

Nigel: You also told me the Masons were holding human sacrifices at Bilderburg! 

ECH'S phone rings. He answers.

000: Show me.

NIGEL shows her ID to 000 and he nods.

Payne: So what now?

000: We take you into confinement, then we take down Cramulus before whatever the hell is happening, happens.

Nigel: Goddamn it Trip, we can't throw him in confinement, you want him to disappear?

000: You want us to disappear?

Nigel: Ever since the raids I've laid low, haven't passed on information or anything unless there's real danger, and since we've never been caught I assume you've done the same...

000: Yes, but this is real danger....

Payne: Look, give me five minutes with Cram ,then I'm all yours. I want answers too.

ECH: (phone down) Guys lets work this out later, we're being raided.

Nigel: When?

ECH: Now, let's go!