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A Parable in T Minor

Started by tyrannosaurus vex, October 03, 2012, 06:58:27 AM

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#15
October 03, 2012, 08:21:56 PM
Quote from: The Good Reverend Roger on October 03, 2012, 08:19:08 PM
Quote from: v3x on October 03, 2012, 08:17:30 PM
^ note rewrite ^

Hmm.  Liked the other ending better.  It had more punch.

compromise? (rewrote ending again)
Evil and Unfeeling Arse-Flenser From The City of the Damned.

The Good Reverend Roger

#16
October 03, 2012, 08:23:00 PM
Quote from: v3x on October 03, 2012, 08:21:56 PM
Quote from: The Good Reverend Roger on October 03, 2012, 08:19:08 PM
Quote from: v3x on October 03, 2012, 08:17:30 PM
^ note rewrite ^

Hmm.  Liked the other ending better.  It had more punch.

compromise? (rewrote ending again)


Mmmm.

Still like the original.  Usually you're better off with your first write up, on these sorts of things.
" It's just that Depeche Mode were a bunch of optimistic loveburgers."
- TGRR, shaming himself forever, 7/8/2017

"Billy, when I say that ethics is our number one priority and safety is also our number one priority, you should take that to mean exactly what I said. Also quality. That's our number one priority as well. Don't look at me that way, you're in the corporate world now and this is how it works."
- TGRR, raising the bar at work.

tyrannosaurus vex

#17
October 03, 2012, 08:30:18 PM
ok you win :(
Evil and Unfeeling Arse-Flenser From The City of the Damned.

The Good Reverend Roger

#18
October 03, 2012, 08:33:35 PM
Quote from: v3x on October 03, 2012, 08:30:18 PM
ok you win :(

Well, write it however you want.  I'm just saying this ending has way more punch.  If you're faking the bible, keep the punchlines short.
" It's just that Depeche Mode were a bunch of optimistic loveburgers."
- TGRR, shaming himself forever, 7/8/2017

"Billy, when I say that ethics is our number one priority and safety is also our number one priority, you should take that to mean exactly what I said. Also quality. That's our number one priority as well. Don't look at me that way, you're in the corporate world now and this is how it works."
- TGRR, raising the bar at work.

tyrannosaurus vex

#19
October 03, 2012, 08:42:01 PM
Quote from: The Good Reverend Roger on October 03, 2012, 08:33:35 PM
Quote from: v3x on October 03, 2012, 08:30:18 PM
ok you win :(

Well, write it however you want.  I'm just saying this ending has way more punch.  If you're faking the bible, keep the punchlines short.

No you're right. No more edits.
Evil and Unfeeling Arse-Flenser From The City of the Damned.

Mesozoic Mister Nigel

#20
October 03, 2012, 09:24:51 PM
 :lulz: This is great!
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#21
October 04, 2012, 03:29:25 PM
This is awesome.
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