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Enlightenment
« on: February 18, 2020, 04:56:47 pm »
Enlightenment

listen to everything around you
listen, and tell me everything is well and good
listen and tell no lies

open your eyes and watch
see what happens in the shadows
what we hide from sight to keep up our perfect facade
to say that we are better than them
to say that it could be worse
to say at least you don't live there
excuses; all of them
told from those who annot see, and those who choose not to
those who are lucky enough to close their eyes and ears

many cannot
many are forced to see
many are born into what we say is not
we say they lie
we say it is their fault
we do not trust them
we should; you should

when you close your eyes the world is perfect
when you close your eyes the world is kind and fair
do not lose sight of that
envision that world and make it a reality
but never forget that it is not
never forget to look into the shadows
never forget the people that are hidden
never forget how they will be hidden
never forget how they will try and slander their names
the names of innocent; of victims
question who they push as heroes
question the words they use
question what you believe
and what you are told

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Re: Enlightenment
« Reply #1 on: February 18, 2020, 04:57:07 pm »
Needs some light edits, but this is what my kid wrote.

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Re: Enlightenment
« Reply #2 on: February 18, 2020, 05:33:06 pm »
Needs some light edits, but this is what my kid wrote.

That's amazing.  How old is your kid?
"It's how we roll,
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Re: Enlightenment
« Reply #3 on: February 18, 2020, 10:21:00 pm »
Needs some light edits, but this is what my kid wrote.

That's amazing.  How old is your kid?

13 when she did this. I have permission to do it up for the 2020 Holy Nonsense, just need a pen name from her.

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Re: Enlightenment
« Reply #4 on: February 18, 2020, 10:38:54 pm »
 :mittens: :mittens:

I just got told,
And strangely...
Consoled

That was just the thing to read before collapsing after the day I've had.

I would add, though only as commentary as the edits aside the poem is near perfect,
To those last few lines, document everything.

You can't get out backward.  You have to go forward to go back.. better press on! - Willie Wonka, PBUH

Life can be seen as a game with no reset button, no extra lives, and if the power goes out there is no restarting.  If that's all you see life as you are not long for this world, and never will get it.

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Re: Enlightenment
« Reply #5 on: February 19, 2020, 02:41:47 am »

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Re: Enlightenment
« Reply #6 on: February 19, 2020, 02:47:29 am »
Seneschal Andromeda Bopp
Such a great name!
This one has got legs
And her mother's tentacles.
You can't get out backward.  You have to go forward to go back.. better press on! - Willie Wonka, PBUH

Life can be seen as a game with no reset button, no extra lives, and if the power goes out there is no restarting.  If that's all you see life as you are not long for this world, and never will get it.

"Ayn Rand never swung a hammer in her life and had serious dominance issues" - The Fountainhead

"World domination is such an ugly phrase. I prefer to call it world optimisation."
 - Harry Potter and the Methods of Rationality :lulz:

"You program the controller to do the thing, only it doesn't do the thing.  It does something else entirely, or nothing at all.  It's like voting."
- Billy, Aug 21st, 2019

"It's not even chaos anymore. It's BANAL."
- Doktor Hamish Howl

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Re: Enlightenment
« Reply #7 on: February 19, 2020, 04:26:03 am »
Needs some light edits, but this is what my kid wrote.

That's amazing.  How old is your kid?

13 when she did this. I have permission to do it up for the 2020 Holy Nonsense, just need a pen name from her.

That's pretty damned good for 13.  Most 13 year olds write poetry, and their parents save it to Morrissey-shame them mercilessly 10 years later.

But that's actually pretty damn good.
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(Girl, look at that gross margin)"
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Re: Enlightenment
« Reply #8 on: February 19, 2020, 12:53:12 pm »
yeah, that's really good! You've got a clever youngling.

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Re: Enlightenment
« Reply #9 on: February 19, 2020, 05:05:16 pm »
She of course HATES IT because she's now 15 and everything she's ever done is cringe. We talked about the minor edits at the end to deal with the pronoun confusion and she's genuinely ok with the HN license and everything, but no amount of praise is getting through that jaded teenage thing.

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Re: Enlightenment
« Reply #10 on: February 20, 2020, 02:39:15 pm »
She of course HATES IT because she's now 15 and everything she's ever done is cringe. We talked about the minor edits at the end to deal with the pronoun confusion and she's genuinely ok with the HN license and everything, but no amount of praise is getting through that jaded teenage thing.

This is all normal, QG.  If she was happy with it, next thing you know, she'd be wearing a beret and holding clove cigarettes backward while saying "EET EES ALL SO BORRRRREENG!"
"It's how we roll,
Dunning-Krueger out of control
(Girl, look at that gross margin)"
- TGRR

Evil doesn't work without good people. Good people will do the most repugnant, nasty shit for what they think are "the right reasons"