Enlightenment
listen to everything around you
listen, and tell me everything is well and good
listen and tell no lies
open your eyes and watch
see what happens in the shadows
what we hide from sight to keep up our perfect facade
to say that we are better than them
to say that it could be worse
to say at least you don't live there
excuses; all of them
told from those who annot see, and those who choose not to
those who are lucky enough to close their eyes and ears
many cannot
many are forced to see
many are born into what we say is not
we say they lie
we say it is their fault
we do not trust them
we should; you should
when you close your eyes the world is perfect
when you close your eyes the world is kind and fair
do not lose sight of that
envision that world and make it a reality
but never forget that it is not
never forget to look into the shadows
never forget the people that are hidden
never forget how they will be hidden
never forget how they will try and slander their names
the names of innocent; of victims
question who they push as heroes
question the words they use
question what you believe
and what you are told
Needs some light edits, but this is what my kid wrote.
Quote from: Q. G. Pennyworth on February 18, 2020, 04:57:07 PM
Needs some light edits, but this is what my kid wrote.
That's amazing. How old is your kid?
Quote from: Doktor Howl on February 18, 2020, 05:33:06 PM
Quote from: Q. G. Pennyworth on February 18, 2020, 04:57:07 PM
Needs some light edits, but this is what my kid wrote.
That's amazing. How old is your kid?
13 when she did this. I have permission to do it up for the 2020 Holy Nonsense, just need a pen name from her.
:mittens: :mittens:
I just got told,
And strangely...
Consoled
That was just the thing to read before collapsing after the day I've had.
I would add, though only as commentary as the edits aside the poem is near perfect,
To those last few lines, document everything.
(https://i.imgur.com/IHsuMwr.jpg)
Seneschal Andromeda Bopp
Such a great name!
This one has got legs
And her mother's tentacles.
Quote from: Q. G. Pennyworth on February 18, 2020, 10:21:00 PM
Quote from: Doktor Howl on February 18, 2020, 05:33:06 PM
Quote from: Q. G. Pennyworth on February 18, 2020, 04:57:07 PM
Needs some light edits, but this is what my kid wrote.
That's amazing. How old is your kid?
13 when she did this. I have permission to do it up for the 2020 Holy Nonsense, just need a pen name from her.
That's pretty damned good for 13. Most 13 year olds write poetry, and their parents save it to Morrissey-shame them mercilessly 10 years later.
But that's actually pretty damn good.
yeah, that's really good! You've got a clever youngling.
She of course HATES IT because she's now 15 and everything she's ever done is cringe. We talked about the minor edits at the end to deal with the pronoun confusion and she's genuinely ok with the HN license and everything, but no amount of praise is getting through that jaded teenage thing.
Quote from: Q. G. Pennyworth on February 19, 2020, 05:05:16 PM
She of course HATES IT because she's now 15 and everything she's ever done is cringe. We talked about the minor edits at the end to deal with the pronoun confusion and she's genuinely ok with the HN license and everything, but no amount of praise is getting through that jaded teenage thing.
This is all normal, QG. If she was happy with it, next thing you know, she'd be wearing a beret and holding clove cigarettes backward while saying "EET EES ALL SO BORRRRREENG!"
I love it!
it sounds very good to me, kind of calming.
open your eyes and see more than what is there...
start to think and ask yourself questions...
you're more than you think, we are strong