Quote from: Raz Tech on August 22, 2014, 12:52:28 PM
It strikes me as inconsistent.
Guessing it's supposed to be about gun violence, but perhaps I'm a little biased by recent events.
I think you need to rewrite it once or twice or three times.
It's not very consistent, it's not supposed to be about gun violence, and I probably should re-write it once or twice and three more times