2 pm. just three hours seperate me from Sisyphusian Hell.
i've got le proletariat bleux.
is there much worse than a useless job that underpays, caters to and fosters the type of dreggs that make for a softer and softer society, and watching little mexican children build a fort in the funiture area while their negligent mother shops for two hours?
come on sisyphus, ro' that rock up
don'cha wanna hear th'sound o' th'clock-ah
Hade gunna promise that it won't fall down again
come on sisyphus, ro' that rock up
brothers and sisters, THEY have made us the new niggers. (not that there's anything wrong with black people, and it's farkin reddickerous that anyone would get offended by me using this word given it's only connotation is a "stupid or uneducated person"- which slave-negros were, due to the White Man's Oppression. Why did i waste my time writing this?) there's this promise somewhere: they say that if we work harder, we can accomplish more. okay, i'll agree to the basic formula...but it begs the question: WHAT THE FUCK ARE "WE" TRING TO ACCOMPLISH?
"oh, well it depends on the person. everybody has different goals in life and blah blah self serving rationalized bullshit blah bah baaah baaaah..."
you see? you've become their cattle, led by a loosely tied reign to slaughterhouses where the judas cows stand and call you in like sirens, coaxing and singing a song of satisfaction.
so now that we've accepted this slaughterhouse as our new home and final destination, let us fall to the ground and kiss the hooves of these sacred cows and give thanks to our breeders that we should be graced with such a life.
and as the sharp knives of the redeemer liberate our souls from the flesh, let us look back on all that we have accomplished:
that mortgage that we paid off. all the credit card bills. living parts of your life, if not all of it, check to check with a little carrot of another check in a few weeks, and being chased by bills and taxes and debt as a cattle prod.
our contributions to a new generation of useless cattle and bleeting idiots.
then in the last moment just before your soul finally snuffs out, you chance to also glimpse everything you've really accomplished, trivial or not, roll back down the hill.
"But...but but....but hades promised...he promised that this time the rock wouldn't roll back down....i have to come back and roll it up again?"
then blackness.
this is what we've accomplished.
finished 2:35pm
enjoy your impending independence next week.
even though you are preaching to the choir (which I am sure you're aware of), I dig your style.
please to keep it coming.
A thought I've had on the Sisyphus/Society metaphor:
Say we get the rock to the top of the hill - then what? Eternity is a long time to have nothing to do.
Sit and think.
For eternity.
Wouldn't be half bad, once we were used to it.
Do you feel that Humanity is ready to sit and think?
Quote from: putzDo you feel that Humanity is ready to sit and think?
If we go by the metaphor, they've been pushing the same boulder up the same hill for a long time.
Maybe it's close.
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Call it what you will, but I'm still having problems with the 4th paragraph, even with your disclaimer.
Agreed. It puts a bit of a hiccup in the flow of the piece, at least for me anyway. Plus, with a lot of people it's not a lack of education that's the problem. Because these days society teaches you if you DON'T go to college and get a Bachelor's degree you = dirt. The problem is that education has a lack of imagination and the ability to foster imagination. Sure, they talk about creativity and problem solving but that's really mostly through logic and not PURE creativity.
The rest of the piece is good though. Just think that part maybe could be re-worked.
I think you should just remove the disclaimer. It breaks up the flow, and, frankly, if people aren't smart enough to figure out what you're trying to say there, then fuck 'em.
As far as that go, I disagree with the concept that "they" have made" us the "new niggers".
I could go either way on that, but I think that sometimes in order to make the delivery more powerful, you gotta take artistic license.
and let's face it...
the second you say "nigger", you've got EVERYONE'S attention.
True. But at the same time, they've stopped listening to you point, and start arguing over the use and meaning of the word nigger.
Case in point.
Yeah, I kind of understand why the word is being used but I disagree with the concept and I think it detracts from an otherwise fine piece of writing. I mean, if you think you need to disclaim or explain why you are using a certain word or phrase and you need to do it in more than 3 or 4 words it's probably best to find another way of saying what you're trying to say. Know what I'm saying? Because like someone mentioned earlier you are preaching to the choir. If you want to preach outside the choir that word is going to short circuit your message really quick.
Quote from: deetSit and think.
For eternity.
Wouldn't be half bad, once we were used to it.
This is about as close to hell as you can get.
Why do you think kids are punished with sitting in a corner and thinking?
Because.
They're terrible at it.
Quote from: East Coast Hustleeven though you are preaching to the choir (which I am sure you're aware of), I dig your style.
please to keep it coming.
you don't even remember me. pfft.
as for complaints of my disclaimer, sure...anyone needing to have that explained is a fuckin retard, but that's not why i included it.
call it my own personal sisyphus, i like irony.
1) yes I do. that doesn't preclude me from liking your style or wanting you to write more.
2) don't get yer manties in a bunch. people are just offering constructive criticism. If the point of the rant was to reach an audience other than yourself, the disclaimer detracts from the flow and the message.