Principia Discordia

Principia Discordia => Bring and Brag => Topic started by: P3nT4gR4m on July 20, 2007, 02:28:15 PM

Title: After the messia complex...
Post by: P3nT4gR4m on July 20, 2007, 02:28:15 PM
Legalise the devil's in the details
Whereupon ambition turns to dust
Once upon a time I had ambitions of my own
For how long before my flesh and bone should rust?

Spin the wheel and watch another sunrise
The attic of my mind required a clean
Silhouettes and shadows waged a war upon the senses
wrote epitaphs for all my hopes and dreams

With all the certainty that I can muster
I'm surrounded by the sleeping and the damned
I tried to wake them up or offer them redemption
but they're too jaded or confused to understand

To all intent and purpose I keep silence
Muffled by a veil of ignorance
Forsaking undertakings to stir up and awaken
I laughed so hard I almost shit my pants
Title: Re: After the messia complex...
Post by: Darth Cupcake on July 20, 2007, 02:42:25 PM
 :lulz:

That last line is so solid.
Title: Re: After the messia complex...
Post by: Triple Zero on July 20, 2007, 04:00:43 PM
that was pretty good!
Title: Re: After the messia complex...
Post by: Kaienne on July 20, 2007, 04:13:09 PM
Quote from: Darth Cupcake on July 20, 2007, 02:42:25 PM
:lulz:

That last line is so solid.

Agreed.
Title: Re: After the messia complex...
Post by: Cramulus on July 23, 2007, 08:14:28 PM
I like it. The meter could use some tightening, it sounds a bit weird to me when I read it out loud. But the final stanza is bangin'.