So i'm sitting in the shithole behind the other shithole where I make my living, 28 hours awake and sucking in cancer sticks like there's no tomorrow, and shit I can't help but feel I'm sitting in a wound. A pile of cigarette butts higher which reaches me knees waits by my side, along with the discoloured and sodden crap of I don't know what. Shit, it's a fucking wound on the face of the planet. But it doesn't end there. The concrete which creeps ever onwards along the ground, the rusty brick walls surrounding me, the sickly smog which i'm breathing - it's all a wound. It's the typical shit which those damn hippies whine about, "we're killing the earth man, it's like bad for the planet".
Suck my dick. This cancer's gone beyond critical, we've come too far to heal this wound. I say embrace it. I hate to sound like Mr. Durden here, but hit me as hard as you can. Litter, corrupt, destroy, whatever, it makes no differance. Just do it. Come, heap fire and heap petrol 'pon the pyre! Enough of this shit, let's go out with a bang. Oh, i'll probably wake up tomorrow happy as a baby, but while i'm sucking down these tubes of death i'll bring the end along for a ride...
Yeah, that Stockholm syndrome is a real bitch, isn't it?
You can smoke at work?
Newsflash: "The Earth" could give a flying fuck about us and will be just fine after we've shat where we eat and poisoned ourselves out of existence. You think it doesn't matter, and that you should accelerate the poisoning of our environment (by "our" I mean "human" and by "environment" I mean "where we live")? You go to town and die as fast as you can, man. Just stay the fuck away from me and my nice green state, because I plan to live a while.
Quote from: LMNO on July 23, 2009, 04:21:18 PM
You can smoke at work?
Being a manager, I can do what I please. Including taking smokos.
Quote from: Blacksaber on July 23, 2009, 04:38:53 PM
Newsflash: "The Earth" could give a flying fuck about us and will be just fine after we've shat where we eat and poisoned ourselves out of existence. You think it doesn't matter, and that you should accelerate the poisoning of our environment (by "our" I mean "human" and by "environment" I mean "where we live")? You go to town and die as fast as you can, man. Just stay the fuck away from me and my nice green state, because I plan to live a while.
How can the earth give a flying fuck about us, that's assuming some kind of sentience isn't it? I don't think that it dose matter, but I also don't think that it doesn't matter. Now hit me again.
@ cadaver: not everyone is selfdestructive, dont hurt others while hurting yourself.
@nigel: ... i was gonna bitch at you, but cadaver sounds like an idiot and i have no idea what his point is.
As long as i dont know wat he is trying to say i wont bother defending him.
@cadaver: lrn 2 communicate clearer.
Quote from: Regret on July 23, 2009, 11:54:47 PM
@nigel: ... i was gonna bitch at you, but cadaver sounds like an idiot and i have no idea what his point is.
As long as i dont know wat he is trying to say i wont bother defending him.
@cadaver: lrn 2 communicate clearer.
who said i'm saying anything? it's just a rant
A rant that sounds like you're telling people to go ahead and shit all over my planet.
Fuck you. You shit up your own hole. Stay the fuck away from mine, dickface.
Quote from: Squid on July 24, 2009, 03:02:03 AM
A rant that sounds like you're telling people to go ahead and shit all over my planet.
Fuck you. You shit up your own hole. Stay the fuck away from mine, dickface.
No, a rant that tells people to go ahead and
keep shitting over
my planet.
Quote from: cadaver on July 24, 2009, 02:54:19 AM
Quote from: Regret on July 23, 2009, 11:54:47 PM
@nigel: ... i was gonna bitch at you, but cadaver sounds like an idiot and i have no idea what his point is.
As long as i dont know wat he is trying to say i wont bother defending him.
@cadaver: lrn 2 communicate clearer.
who said i'm saying anything? it's just a rant
Are you saying rants don't say anything? If you don't have anything to say, best keep it to yourself.
Quote from: cadaver on July 24, 2009, 03:04:45 AM
Quote from: Squid on July 24, 2009, 03:02:03 AM
A rant that sounds like you're telling people to go ahead and shit all over my planet.
Fuck you. You shit up your own hole. Stay the fuck away from mine, dickface.
No, a rant that tells people to go ahead and keep shitting over my planet.
If everyone doesn't
stop shitting over
our planet then we're fucked.
Your whole "rant" was akin to Christian rapture talk. "It doesn't matter because it's the end of times and the Lawrd will save us anyway".
GTFO my 3 billion year lineage, shitter.
Quote from: The Lord and Lady Omnibus Fuck on July 24, 2009, 10:09:30 AM
Are you saying rants don't say anything? If you don't have anything to say, best keep it to yourself.
No, I think that rant's have no meaning unless they are given to it. Someone (ie. those who've replied) can go ahead and not give any relevance, meaning, etc. to a piece of writing, whereas someone else could use it as
gospel. Not only that but the relevance words have is also determinined by the context, etc.
Quote from: cadaver on July 24, 2009, 03:23:17 PM
Quote from: The Lord and Lady Omnibus Fuck on July 24, 2009, 10:09:30 AM
Are you saying rants don't say anything? If you don't have anything to say, best keep it to yourself.
No, I think that rant's have no meaning unless they are given to it. Someone (ie. those who've replied) can go ahead and not give any relevance, meaning, etc. to a piece of writing, whereas someone else could use it as gospel. Not only that but the relevance words have is also determinined by the context, etc.
Quote from: Kai on July 24, 2009, 12:38:14 PM
Your whole "rant" was akin to Christian rapture talk. "It doesn't matter because it's the end of times and the Lawrd will save us anyway".
Quite the opposite, it's intended as a rage through use of sarcasm.
Lets not destroy the Earth.
I keep most of my stuff there, for starters.
Quote from: cadaver on July 24, 2009, 03:23:17 PM
Quote from: The Lord and Lady Omnibus Fuck on July 24, 2009, 10:09:30 AM
Are you saying rants don't say anything? If you don't have anything to say, best keep it to yourself.
No, I think that rant's have no meaning unless they are given to it. Someone (ie. those who've replied) can go ahead and not give any relevance, meaning, etc. to a piece of writing, whereas someone else could use it as gospel. Not only that but the relevance words have is also determinined by the context, etc.
So then what exactly is the point of your rant?
how come none of you are thinking of the dolphins
:emo:
Quote from: Cain on July 24, 2009, 04:09:31 PM
Lets not destroy the Earth.
I keep most of my stuff there, for starters.
Most of your stuff?
Do you keep the rest at .. say, an ORBITAL PLATFORM :tinfoilhat:
Privileges of membership in a most righteous organization, I guess
8)
Quote from: cadaver on July 24, 2009, 03:23:17 PM
Quote from: The Lord and Lady Omnibus Fuck on July 24, 2009, 10:09:30 AM
Are you saying rants don't say anything? If you don't have anything to say, best keep it to yourself.
No, I think that rant's have no meaning unless they are given to it. Someone (ie. those who've replied) can go ahead and not give any relevance, meaning, etc. to a piece of writing, whereas someone else could use it as gospel. Not only that but the relevance words have is also determinined by the context, etc.
IOW you are a poor writer who does little to convey your meaning to the reader, and you want to lay all responsibility at the feet of the reader instead of improving your communication skills.
I see.
I have no reason to interact with you further.
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Quote from: Thurnez Isa on July 24, 2009, 04:54:04 PM
how come none of you are thinking of the dolphins
:emo:
. . . because it was
YOUR turn today . . . qed
Oh, come on guys, he called it himself; he's pulling a Palahniuk.
Just go with the nihilistic flow.
Yeah, I saw the point.
But still...I keep most of my stuff here. If the planet goes out in a blaze of glory, I can't exactly put it all into storage and pick it up later, can I?
You just need to set up a Stabel Time Loop (http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/StableTimeLoop).
Quote from: Squid on July 24, 2009, 04:51:28 PM
So then what exactly is the point of your rant?
What is the point of my rant then. Well that's a good question. What do you see as the point of my rant? Personally, I see rants as expressions of an idea or feeling, so I guess the point of this rant to me is to get out what I was feeling at the time it was written.
Quote from: The Lord and Lady Omnibus Fuck on July 24, 2009, 05:21:04 PM
IOW you are a poor writer who does little to convey your meaning to the reader, and you want to lay all responsibility at the feet of the reader instead of improving your communication skills.
Instead of bitching about it then why don't you tell me how you think I should do that, give me more of a guideline to write in a form you'd think I'd be better suited to. Or not, because hey,
it's the internet.
Quote from: LMNO on July 24, 2009, 06:00:53 PM
Oh, come on guys, he called it himself; he's pulling a Palahniuk.
Just go with the nihilistic flow.
thanks man, glad to see a little support. Also, thanks for reading into it a bit.
I see you your thread title and raise you a "Whatever x infinity" on your main idea in the op. Which was really fucking selfish. But I guess we all have to let the inner child have a tantrum now and then.
Quote from: Jenne on July 25, 2009, 02:52:07 AM
I see you your thread title and raise you a "Whatever x infinity" on your main idea in the op. Which was really fucking selfish. But I guess we all have to let the inner child have a tantrum now and then.
this.
Quote from: cadaver on July 23, 2009, 03:56:47 PM
So i'm sitting in the shithole behind the other shithole where I make my living, 28 hours awake and sucking in cancer sticks like there's no tomorrow, and shit I can't help but feel I'm sitting in a wound. A pile of cigarette butts higher which reaches me knees waits by my side, along with the discoloured and sodden crap of I don't know what. Shit, it's a fucking wound on the face of the planet. But it doesn't end there. The concrete which creeps ever onwards along the ground, the rusty brick walls surrounding me, the sickly smog which i'm breathing - it's all a wound. It's the typical shit which those damn hippies whine about, "we're killing the earth man, it's like bad for the planet".
Suck my dick. This cancer's gone beyond critical, we've come too far to heal this wound. I say embrace it. I hate to sound like Mr. Durden here, but hit me as hard as you can. Litter, corrupt, destroy, whatever, it makes no differance. Just do it. Come, heap fire and heap petrol 'pon the pyre! Enough of this shit, let's go out with a bang. Oh, i'll probably wake up tomorrow happy as a baby, but while i'm sucking down these tubes of death i'll bring the end along for a ride...
(http://www.tovx.com/Motivational%20Posters/emo/emo.jpg)
Quote from: The Lord and Lady Omnibus Fuck on July 24, 2009, 05:21:04 PM
Quote from: cadaver on July 24, 2009, 03:23:17 PM
Quote from: The Lord and Lady Omnibus Fuck on July 24, 2009, 10:09:30 AM
Are you saying rants don't say anything? If you don't have anything to say, best keep it to yourself.
No, I think that rant's have no meaning unless they are given to it. Someone (ie. those who've replied) can go ahead and not give any relevance, meaning, etc. to a piece of writing, whereas someone else could use it as gospel. Not only that but the relevance words have is also determinined by the context, etc.
IOW you are a poor writer who does little to convey your meaning to the reader, and you want to lay all responsibility at the feet of the reader instead of improving your communication skills.
I see.
I have no reason to interact with you further.
Yep. This guy's a bozo. End of story.
Quote from: The Good Reverend Roger on July 25, 2009, 07:41:12 AM
Yep. This guy's a bozo. End of story.
Am I going to get any actual criticism though? Or will this just stay as a big HURR DURR from the sidelines?
Quote from: cadaver on July 25, 2009, 08:59:23 PM
Quote from: The Good Reverend Roger on July 25, 2009, 07:41:12 AM
Yep. This guy's a bozo. End of story.
Am I going to get any actual criticism though? Or will this just stay as a big HURR DURR from the sidelines?
hxxp://www.everyauthor.com/
Quote from: cadaver on July 25, 2009, 08:59:23 PM
Quote from: The Good Reverend Roger on July 25, 2009, 07:41:12 AM
Yep. This guy's a bozo. End of story.
Am I going to get any actual criticism though? Or will this just stay as a big HURR DURR from the sidelines?
Um, you got criticism? What did you expect?
Quote from: fictionpuss on July 24, 2009, 05:54:32 PM
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You still haven't managed to say anything. I'm giving you the benefit of the doubt as the only vague message I can discern "keep shitting over my planet", is such an obviously dumb concept that I am hoping that you have something vaguely beyond the surface to offer.
See what I did there? Optimism kicks pessimism in the balls every time, because pessimism wants pain. Not saying you want pain, just as long as you hold onto your self-destructive pessimistic behaviour patterns, you can expect to observe nothing else.
OKAY CRITICISM YOU ASK WE PROVIDE
Quote from: cadaver on July 23, 2009, 03:56:47 PMA pile of cigarette butts higher which reaches me knees
seriously? that's pretty impressive.
unless you're a midget.
in either case, PICS PLEASE
(and if you're a midget, include yourself on the pics)
Quotealong with the discoloured and sodden crap of I don't know what.
did you find out what it was?
WHAT WAS IT
ENQUIRING MINDS NEED TO KNOW
(also you could have totally used something impressively symbolic instead of "I don't know what", missed opportunity, really)
QuoteThe concrete which creeps ever onwards along the ground
is this in your room?
problem with the carpet? i thought you said you're the manager, so why do you live in a room with shitty carpet where the concrete shows through?
Quotethe rusty brick walls surrounding me
how can brick walls be rusty?
"rust" is generally known as oxydized metal, usually iron. "brick" means stone, lacking metal and/or iron.
Quotethe sickly smog which i'm breathing - it's all a wound. It's the typical shit which those damn hippies whine about, "we're killing the earth man, it's like bad for the planet".
Suck my dick.
this is a straw man.
QuoteThis cancer's gone beyond critical, we've come too far to heal this wound. I say embrace it. I hate to sound like Mr. Durden here, but hit me as hard as you can. Litter, corrupt, destroy, whatever, it makes no differance. Just do it. Come, heap fire and heap petrol 'pon the pyre! Enough of this shit, let's go out with a bang. Oh, i'll probably wake up tomorrow happy as a baby, but while i'm sucking down these tubes of death i'll bring the end along for a ride...
and this appears to be the entire point of your pathetic little rant.
perhaps you should read up on "je ne sais quois", because your writing doesn't have ANY of it.
see, us Discordians (I know the others don't like if any of them speaks for anyone, heheh), we don't mind a littlebit of fire, we LIKE mr Durden (he's our little bitch, you see), littering not so much, corruption is a really sharp blade so be careful, and destruction sure thing. going out with a bang? it's the only way.
BUT THAT DOESNT MEAN WE'RE IN A FUCKING HURRY IF THERE'S FUN TO BE HAD ALONG THE WAY, nononono it's the fun first, you see.
otherwise you're going to be "that guy". you know him, Brad Pitt was Mr Durden, but he also was "that guy" in 12 Monkeys, who was laughing and laughing when everything was going to shit, but he WASNT HAVING FUN, no he was laughing cause he didnt know what else to do, finally everything was going to shit and ... hey fuck NOW WHAT DO I D--glrbrbgb the end. SUCKER.
so what now do you do?
you woke up happy as a baby the next morning and ... what did you get?
an evening feeling shitty about yourself and screaming at the digital internet world that some non-existant straw hippies could suck your dick and some people to corrupt, destroy, set shit on fire.
WHILE YOU COULD HAVE GONE OUT, GOT YOUR DICK SUCKED BY REAL HIPPIES AND CORRUPT, DESTROY AND SET SHIT ON FIRE AND HAVE A REAL GOOD TIME (it makes no "differance", phah!)
now, fuck off or start being interesting.
Quote from: cadaver on July 25, 2009, 08:59:23 PM
Quote from: The Good Reverend Roger on July 25, 2009, 07:41:12 AM
Yep. This guy's a bozo. End of story.
Am I going to get any actual criticism though? Or will this just stay as a big HURR DURR from the sidelines?
You could try giving up smoking if they have such a bad effect on you - downers for the down under hunh?
If nicotine gives you nihilism - just say no!
Quote from: cadaver on July 25, 2009, 08:59:23 PM
Quote from: The Good Reverend Roger on July 25, 2009, 07:41:12 AM
Yep. This guy's a bozo. End of story.
Am I going to get any actual criticism though? Or will this just stay as a big HURR DURR from the sidelines?
This isn't Creative Writing 101. If you want C&C join a writers group or take a class.
Quote from: cadaver on July 24, 2009, 03:25:49 PM
Quote from: cadaver on July 24, 2009, 03:23:17 PM
Quote from: The Lord and Lady Omnibus Fuck on July 24, 2009, 10:09:30 AM
Are you saying rants don't say anything? If you don't have anything to say, best keep it to yourself.
No, I think that rant's have no meaning unless they are given to it. Someone (ie. those who've replied) can go ahead and not give any relevance, meaning, etc. to a piece of writing, whereas someone else could use it as gospel. Not only that but the relevance words have is also determinined by the context, etc.
Quote from: Kai on July 24, 2009, 12:38:14 PM
Your whole "rant" was akin to Christian rapture talk. "It doesn't matter because it's the end of times and the Lawrd will save us anyway".
Quite the opposite, it's intended as a rage through use of sarcasm.
You need to work on your depiction of sarcasm in writing. It comes off to me as emo nihilism, and your choice of subject makes it something I can't relate to at all.
Quote from: Kai on July 26, 2009, 01:33:00 AM
You need to work on your depiction of sarcasm in writing. It comes off to me as emo nihilism, and your choice of subject makes it something I can't relate to at all.
Thanks, I'll try to do so in the future
Quote from: MMIX on July 25, 2009, 10:28:58 PM
You could try giving up smoking if they have such a bad effect on you - downers for the down under hunh?
If nicotine gives you nihilism - just say no!
Haha, I really wouldn't say it gives me nihilism, more so something that helps me through it when I'm feeling that way. I'd consider myself as more of an absurdist anyway.
Quote from: Triple Zero on July 25, 2009, 10:05:46 PM
OKAY CRITICISM YOU ASK WE PROVIDE
Quote from: cadaver on July 23, 2009, 03:56:47 PMA pile of cigarette butts higher which reaches me knees
seriously? that's pretty impressive.
unless you're a midget.
in either case, PICS PLEASE
(and if you're a midget, include yourself on the pics)
Quotealong with the discoloured and sodden crap of I don't know what.
did you find out what it was?
WHAT WAS IT
ENQUIRING MINDS NEED TO KNOW
(also you could have totally used something impressively symbolic instead of "I don't know what", missed opportunity, really)
QuoteThe concrete which creeps ever onwards along the ground
is this in your room?
problem with the carpet? i thought you said you're the manager, so why do you live in a room with shitty carpet where the concrete shows through?
Quotethe rusty brick walls surrounding me
how can brick walls be rusty?
"rust" is generally known as oxydized metal, usually iron. "brick" means stone, lacking metal and/or iron.
Quotethe sickly smog which i'm breathing - it's all a wound. It's the typical shit which those damn hippies whine about, "we're killing the earth man, it's like bad for the planet".
Suck my dick.
this is a straw man.
QuoteThis cancer's gone beyond critical, we've come too far to heal this wound. I say embrace it. I hate to sound like Mr. Durden here, but hit me as hard as you can. Litter, corrupt, destroy, whatever, it makes no differance. Just do it. Come, heap fire and heap petrol 'pon the pyre! Enough of this shit, let's go out with a bang. Oh, i'll probably wake up tomorrow happy as a baby, but while i'm sucking down these tubes of death i'll bring the end along for a ride...
and this appears to be the entire point of your pathetic little rant.
perhaps you should read up on "je ne sais quois", because your writing doesn't have ANY of it.
see, us Discordians (I know the others don't like if any of them speaks for anyone, heheh), we don't mind a littlebit of fire, we LIKE mr Durden (he's our little bitch, you see), littering not so much, corruption is a really sharp blade so be careful, and destruction sure thing. going out with a bang? it's the only way.
BUT THAT DOESNT MEAN WE'RE IN A FUCKING HURRY IF THERE'S FUN TO BE HAD ALONG THE WAY, nononono it's the fun first, you see.
otherwise you're going to be "that guy". you know him, Brad Pitt was Mr Durden, but he also was "that guy" in 12 Monkeys, who was laughing and laughing when everything was going to shit, but he WASNT HAVING FUN, no he was laughing cause he didnt know what else to do, finally everything was going to shit and ... hey fuck NOW WHAT DO I D--glrbrbgb the end. SUCKER.
so what now do you do?
you woke up happy as a baby the next morning and ... what did you get?
an evening feeling shitty about yourself and screaming at the digital internet world that some non-existant straw hippies could suck your dick and some people to corrupt, destroy, set shit on fire.
WHILE YOU COULD HAVE GONE OUT, GOT YOUR DICK SUCKED BY REAL HIPPIES AND CORRUPT, DESTROY AND SET SHIT ON FIRE AND HAVE A REAL GOOD TIME (it makes no "differance", phah!)
now, fuck off or start being interesting.
It gets cleaned up every month or two, but i'll take a picture next shift.
The I don't know what is the general crap you'd expect to be in an lane way - empty drink bottles, fast food packaging, general rubbish. As for the walls, they're rust coloured.
What says I don't go out and do shit instead of whining about it though? I guess yeah, I could actually
do something more with any ideas I have, and I am continuing to build that up.
Thanks for the response though ^_^
Quote from: cadaver on July 25, 2009, 08:59:23 PM
Quote from: The Good Reverend Roger on July 25, 2009, 07:41:12 AM
Yep. This guy's a bozo. End of story.
Am I going to get any actual criticism though? Or will this just stay as a big HURR DURR from the sidelines?
You haven't merited actual criticism. Write something worth debating about, and we'll see. Until then...
HURR DURR
Quote from: cadaver on July 23, 2009, 03:56:47 PM
So i'm sitting in the shithole behind the other shithole where I make my living, 28 hours awake and sucking in cancer sticks like there's no tomorrow, and shit I can't help but feel I'm sitting in a wound. A pile of cigarette butts higher which reaches me knees waits by my side, along with the discoloured and sodden crap of I don't know what. Shit, it's a fucking wound on the face of the planet. But it doesn't end there. The concrete which creeps ever onwards along the ground, the rusty brick walls surrounding me, the sickly smog which i'm breathing - it's all a wound. It's the typical shit which those damn hippies whine about, "we're killing the earth man, it's like bad for the planet".
Suck my dick. This cancer's gone beyond critical, we've come too far to heal this wound. I say embrace it. I hate to sound like Mr. Durden here, but hit me as hard as you can. Litter, corrupt, destroy, whatever, it makes no differance. Just do it. Come, heap fire and heap petrol 'pon the pyre! Enough of this shit, let's go out with a bang. Oh, i'll probably wake up tomorrow happy as a baby, but while i'm sucking down these tubes of death i'll bring the end along for a ride...
It's gratifying to think you can "end" the world, but that's not conventionally possible to do. At best we can change it.
Also, it seems like you're blurring the lines between giving up on yourself and giving up on everything else.
Kind of reminds me of the intonation of a Bokononist commiting suicide, "And now I will destroy the whole world!". (Kurt Vonnegut)