Here's a short story I've been working on for a while. I'm trying to get back into the swing of fiction writing. This is a comedy about two futuristic cowboys (?) engaged in a neverending feud. Enjoy!
http://www.scribd.com/doc/26944637/The-Showdown
HaHAAAAA!
that was great :D
you have been spending too much time on the internet though :P
on page 3:
QuoteRex's hair as the milk dripped into the
bucket. Without Pepper, the bucket
wouldn't be quite as full today.
Shouldn't wouldn't be won't?
like this:
QuoteRex's hair as the milk dripped into the
bucket. Without Pepper, the bucket
won't be quite as full today.
Quote from: Regret on February 16, 2010, 05:36:36 PM
Shouldn't wouldn't be won't?
nope, I don't think so.
glad you liked it though!
Quote from: Horrendous Foreign Love Stoat on February 16, 2010, 05:47:26 PM
Hay cram, any chance of a link plain .txt version with no columns so I can read it on my kindle if its not too much bother at all please?
if you click the download link on the scribd page, you can choose to download it as a plain txt. :mrgreen:
sounds awesome, will read this later.
(and Regret, afaik "won't" is short for "will not be" but not for "would not be")
Nice. This was good. Didn't see the end coming, though I did expect both of them to die.
BUMP - I just re-read this for the first time since like March, and zang, this shit's bananas!
a few places could use some rewriting... perhaps expand the ending a bit more. And Hank's dialogue should get more drawly - less "I'm going to get you!" and more "Imma gonna get ye!"
Quote from: Cramulus on February 16, 2010, 04:53:57 PM
Here's a short story I've been working on for a while. I'm trying to get back into the swing of fiction writing. This is a comedy about two futuristic cowboys (?) engaged in a neverending feud. Enjoy!
http://www.scribd.com/doc/26944637/The-Showdown
Nannywall. :argh!:
Hit youtube and listen to "Two Gunslingers" by Tom Petty.
not sure if this'll get past a firewall, but here's the file: http://ifile.it/vi6ok03
Quote from: Cramulus on September 29, 2010, 05:57:42 PM
not sure if this'll get past a firewall, but here's the file: http://ifile.it/vi6ok03
Nope.
I'll look at it at home.
This is fucking awesome!!! Type formatting is off in places (seems italics are screwing things up) but the story ... fucking brilliant! :mittens:
Thanks man!
were there any parts of it that worked particularly well, or not particularly well?
Think it all worked fine. The whole way you handled the concept stuff with the animals made it for me. I was simultaneously pissing myself laughing and in awe of your fucked up imagination.
:lol: thanks again
I'd like to think that this story makes the events of Pac Man and Miss Pac Man make a little more sense.
oh, and posted to my blaggg: http://cramul.us/2010/10/the-showdown/
I thought it was great fun. Sad as fuck, for some reason, when the kid is all upset about the broken boob. But my favorite part was when you just outright said that it was jizz that they were drinking, because the whole story I, and I'm sure other readers, were thinking "jizz. they're drinking jizz. IT'S JIZZ." Coming out and saying it just made it hilarious.
Quote from: Eater of Clowns on October 01, 2010, 05:32:45 PM
I thought it was great fun. Sad as fuck, for some reason, when the kid is all upset about the broken boob. But my favorite part was when you just outright said that it was jizz that they were drinking, because the whole story I, and I'm sure other readers, were thinking "jizz. they're drinking jizz. IT'S JIZZ." Coming out and saying it just made it hilarious.
THIS! :lulz:
I JIZZED YOUR STORE ALL OVER THE TWITTERNETS http://twitter.com/tripzilch/status/26626703564
bump because I need to write more fiction