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Principia Discordia => Literate Chaotic => Topic started by: Bebek Sincap Ratatosk on March 17, 2011, 06:10:42 PM

Title: Here and Now, Boys
Post by: Bebek Sincap Ratatosk on March 17, 2011, 06:10:42 PM
Something I've been poking at, based on a couple lines from the book "Island" by Aldus Huxley its still a little rough and I'm looking for feedback :)

Here and Now, Boys

"Attention, Attention"
a thousand birds are calling
but life is distracting
and the monkeys are appalling.
"Attention, Attention"
the birds sing out again
but no one pays attention
cause they're watching CNN.

"Attention, Attention"
the monkeys all look up
They see Earthquakes,
Tsunamis
Two Girls and a Cup.
Contraptions of Distractions
in the Information Age
sitting in the audience
while the world's all a stage

Information at our fingertips
Lies dripping like honey
from a senator's lips
Oh! Gotta see if the stock market dips.
On the TV, the web and the phone.

All together, we're living all alone

"Attention, Attention"
but no one ever pays
Attention lost its job
in the downsizing craze.
We've shipped it overseas
Embedded with marines
and 'Attention' to the war
is in 30 second scenes.

"Attention, Attention"
somebody hit a nerve
and everyone is screaming
as they get what they deserve
the politicians playing
at their classic two-man con
and no one paid attention
till everything was gone.

Pay attention to the life that's your own
or all together, we'll be living all alone



Title: Re: Here and Now, Boys
Post by: Richter on March 17, 2011, 06:18:00 PM
:mittens:

I like.  Is it going to be set to music?
Title: Re: Here and Now, Boys
Post by: Luna on March 17, 2011, 06:20:53 PM
Quote
Contraptions of Distractions
in the Information Age
sitting in the audience
while the world's all a stage

I particularly like that bit.
Title: Re: Here and Now, Boys
Post by: Bebek Sincap Ratatosk on March 17, 2011, 06:27:35 PM
Quote from: Richter on March 17, 2011, 06:18:00 PM
:mittens:

I like.  Is it going to be set to music?

yes. :)
Title: Re: Here and Now, Boys
Post by: Bebek Sincap Ratatosk on March 17, 2011, 06:32:04 PM
Quote from: Luna on March 17, 2011, 06:20:53 PM
Quote
Contraptions of Distractions
in the Information Age
sitting in the audience
while the world's all a stage

I particularly like that bit.

me too... I think I need to tweak the rest to have that kind of snap.
Title: Re: Here and Now, Boys
Post by: Luna on March 17, 2011, 06:43:33 PM
Quote from: Ratatosk on March 17, 2011, 06:32:04 PM
Quote from: Luna on March 17, 2011, 06:20:53 PM
Quote
Contraptions of Distractions
in the Information Age
sitting in the audience
while the world's all a stage

I particularly like that bit.

me too... I think I need to tweak the rest to have that kind of snap.

Snap is a good word for it.  Good feel there, too.