Before starting I would like to warn you all about 3 things
1 - English is not my first language
2 - A lot of what I am going to write may seem to be nonsense,or to be irrelevant.Maybe it is,but what I am writing is what I feel it is right to write, thus, I would like to ask to everyone who posts here to be honest about what they think, and why they think that.
3 - While I will not say that I wrote this to myself, as I am posting it here, I shall say that it is extremely personal, not in the sense that it might be unique, but in the sense that it is one of the views that are part of who is "me", so, yeah, it would be swell if you could be nice and all to me.
Beggining - Now
We are born. And then consume food, be it meat, bet it plant, be it fungus. We feed. We grow. We die.
From our corpses the bugs and microbes feed,and our own body becomes dirt. And plants grow. And plants are eaten.
The animals that are now eating the plants are being killed by other animals. These animals that now are killing will soon be killed.
They are killed.
They were killed.
And again,they are eaten. We are all eaten, we are all killed.
We can be killed by ourselves, be it slowly as natural decay, be it quickly as suicide (Or maybe that is a redundancy?).
And then,from our corpse, bugs and microbes will grow,and from these remains,plants will eventually grow too.And eventually be eaten.
All that is alive was dead.All that is dead was alive.
What is death if not just a transformation?
What is life if not another.
It's all a trade.
We are not truly dead, as part of us will always remain alive through others.
Nor we are truly alive, as we are dying by each breath we take, and several parts of us are now dead.
We simply rise and fall. Repeatedly
Rise and fall.
Again and again.
That was kind of cool.
But the last line sort of made it seem like you lost your nerve and made it a joke at the last minute.
Yeah, I thought it would be better if it had something to loose the mood a little...I guess I was wrong heh!
Thanks for your comment!
Is it cool if I play with this a little bit for one of my half-pages? I like it overall, but there are a few things I might edit (the parenthetical bit, for one). I'll put in whatever attribution you prefer :)
As long you don't change the meaning and maintain my authory, you can do whatever you want with it =D
Put the name of the author Papa Mistre, if you are going ot publish/post/show to your friends anywhere else.
I like it! It's a nice illustration of the cycle, and succeeds in gravitas without a sense of futility... it even feels a little zen.
Oh,Thank you very much Miss Nigel!
:)
I love how much I don't even consider Nigel a strictly male name anymore and a phrase like "Miss Nigel" doesn't even make me blink :) Just like "Miss Fred" wouldnt :)
Quote from: Triple Zero on February 10, 2012, 09:57:02 PM
I love how much I don't even consider Nigel a strictly male name anymore and a phrase like "Miss Nigel" doesn't even make me blink :) Just like "Miss Fred" wouldnt :)
I find that extremely pleasing.
If in a few years, little girls names Nigel start popping up, I will shit myself!
For real. The only reason I gave it a second thought was: "Hmmm 'Miss Nigel' was that the one that means married or not? No it's more like someone would call a teacher ... wait a minute, Nigel is actually a guy's name" <-- my train of thoughts, roughly.
I just tried to treat her nicely,I've seen some posts from her and she appears to be a quite likable gal ^^"
Was it that strange?
Quote from: Triple Zero on February 10, 2012, 10:55:44 PM
For real. The only reason I gave it a second thought was: "Hmmm 'Miss Nigel' was that the one that means married or not? No it's more like someone would call a teacher ... wait a minute, Nigel is actually a guy's name" <-- my train of thoughts, roughly.
:lulz:
Quote from: Mistre on February 10, 2012, 11:19:06 PM
I just tried to treat her nicely,I've seen some posts from her and she appears to be a quite likable gal ^^"
Was it that strange?
Aw! You said I'm likable! :)
Quote from: Mistre on February 10, 2012, 11:19:06 PM
I just tried to treat her nicely,I've seen some posts from her and she appears to be a quite likable gal ^^"
Was it that strange?
She's really nice right up until your skin falls off and you die screaming with your bones on the outside.
Quote from: The Good Reverend Roger on February 11, 2012, 01:26:45 AM
Quote from: Mistre on February 10, 2012, 11:19:06 PM
I just tried to treat her nicely,I've seen some posts from her and she appears to be a quite likable gal ^^"
Was it that strange?
She's really nice right up until your skin falls off and you die screaming with your bones on the outside.
:lulz:
I wish Nigel was coming to the meetup :cry:
Quote from: Queen_Gogira on February 11, 2012, 02:32:17 AM
I wish Nigel was coming to the meetup :cry:
I wish I was too!
Quote from: Nigel on February 11, 2012, 02:11:33 AM
Quote from: The Good Reverend Roger on February 11, 2012, 01:26:45 AM
Quote from: Mistre on February 10, 2012, 11:19:06 PM
I just tried to treat her nicely,I've seen some posts from her and she appears to be a quite likable gal ^^"
Was it that strange?
She's really nice right up until your skin falls off and you die screaming with your bones on the outside.
:lulz:
I warn them, Nigel. I say "DON'T LOOK DIRECTLY AT THE DARK EMPRESS! THAT'S NOT HER REAL FACE! IT'S SOMEONE ELSE'S FACE, ONLY THEY DON'T GET TO WEAR IT NO MORE!"
And they don't listen. And then I have to get the mop and the halligan tool, and I'm up til 3AM, scrubbing, scrubbing, scrubbing, out damned spot, scrubbing...
Quote from: The Good Reverend Roger on February 11, 2012, 06:53:40 AM
Quote from: Nigel on February 11, 2012, 02:11:33 AM
Quote from: The Good Reverend Roger on February 11, 2012, 01:26:45 AM
Quote from: Mistre on February 10, 2012, 11:19:06 PM
I just tried to treat her nicely,I've seen some posts from her and she appears to be a quite likable gal ^^"
Was it that strange?
She's really nice right up until your skin falls off and you die screaming with your bones on the outside.
:lulz:
I warn them, Nigel. I say "DON'T LOOK DIRECTLY AT THE DARK EMPRESS! THAT'S NOT HER REAL FACE! IT'S SOMEONE ELSE'S FACE, ONLY THEY DON'T GET TO WEAR IT NO MORE!"
And they don't listen. And then I have to get the mop and the halligan tool, and I'm up til 3AM, scrubbing, scrubbing, scrubbing, out damned spot, scrubbing...
Christ, it sounds like you're having MY night...
Quote from: Nigel on February 11, 2012, 06:56:33 AM
Quote from: The Good Reverend Roger on February 11, 2012, 06:53:40 AM
Quote from: Nigel on February 11, 2012, 02:11:33 AM
Quote from: The Good Reverend Roger on February 11, 2012, 01:26:45 AM
Quote from: Mistre on February 10, 2012, 11:19:06 PM
I just tried to treat her nicely,I've seen some posts from her and she appears to be a quite likable gal ^^"
Was it that strange?
She's really nice right up until your skin falls off and you die screaming with your bones on the outside.
:lulz:
I warn them, Nigel. I say "DON'T LOOK DIRECTLY AT THE DARK EMPRESS! THAT'S NOT HER REAL FACE! IT'S SOMEONE ELSE'S FACE, ONLY THEY DON'T GET TO WEAR IT NO MORE!"
And they don't listen. And then I have to get the mop and the halligan tool, and I'm up til 3AM, scrubbing, scrubbing, scrubbing, out damned spot, scrubbing...
Christ, it sounds like you're having MY night...
Sleep is for the weak.
Here's the version I'm considering going with, slight edits for space and style. If you're happy with it, I'll move forward with the pretty
QuoteBeginning - Now
Papa Mistre
We are born. And then consume food, be it meat, bet it plant, be it fungus.
We feed. We grow. We die.
From our corpses the bugs and microbes feed,and our own body becomes dirt.
And plants grow. And plants are eaten.
The animals that are now eating the plants are being killed by other animals.
These animals that now are killing will soon be killed.
They are killed.
They were killed.
And again,they are eaten. We are all eaten, we are all killed.
We can be killed by ourselves, be it slowly as aging, fast as a shotgun.
And then,from our corpse, bugs and microbes will feed and grow,
And from these remains, plants will eventually grow. And these, too, eventually will be eaten.
All that is alive was dead.All that is dead was alive.
What is death if not just a transformation?
What is life if not another.
It's all a trade.
We are not truly dead, as part of us will always remain alive through others.
Nor we are truly alive, as we are dying by each breath we take, and parts of us even now are dead.
We simply rise and fall.
Again and again.
That's alright.
I am really flattered right now cause someone is using my text *-*
This took longer than I expected
http://img692.imageshack.us/img692/8316/riseandfallq.png
Hope you like it!
(switched the link, fixed a couple little things in the image and re-uploaded)
Loved it!