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« on: December 29, 2006, 03:30:39 pm »
So, in my punk cover band, we've finally decided to try our hand at writing our own stuff.  I thought I'd try to incorporate some BIP material into the lyrics.

Be warned:  This is a first draft.  It kind of sucks.  Any suggestions would be wlecome.


"Black Sheep are Still Sheep"

To all you sleeping
This is a message to all you sleeping
Its all passing you by
So get off your hands and knees.

Youve got two feet
So you better fucking use them
And run while you still have legs
Run while you still have legs!

So go ahead,
Try to break away
Try to change your mind
While you still can.
But just remember
As you try and swim upstream
That being a black sheep
Just means youre still a sheep

Its a two man con, and youre the mark
And you cant even tell what side youre on

Cuz its the same side
Always, the same side
So what the fuck are you gonna do about it?

(solo)

Of course youve heard it before
And you pretend to listen
And you think youve got it all figured out

But its all tunnel vision
As you march lock step in line
Being different, just like everybody else.


So go ahead,
Try to break away
Try to change your mind
While you still can.
But just remember
As you try and swim upstream
That being a black sheep
Just means youre still a sheep


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« Reply #1 on: December 29, 2006, 05:36:09 pm »
Other than the mixed metaphor of swimming upstream and being a sheep, it's damned good, LMNO.

I wish I knew the tune that went with it...

ETA:  I think my brothers usually do the tunes first THEN the words, I think anyway...yeah, that sounds about right.

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« Reply #2 on: December 29, 2006, 06:10:45 pm »
Hey, thanks.

I kinda intended the mixed metaphor.  Is it too clunky?

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« Reply #3 on: December 29, 2006, 07:38:17 pm »
Probably not, just caught me when I was reading it.  I'd bet with music, though, it flows really well.  Again, the music makes the song along wiff the words (so flow the mp3 when you have it, yo! :D ).

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« Reply #4 on: January 04, 2007, 03:54:28 pm »
text is good, it really depends on whether you can get it to flow with the music.
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« Reply #5 on: January 06, 2007, 08:47:37 pm »
Looking good Alphapance.
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