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Black Eyes.
« on: April 05, 2010, 06:49:23 pm »
My eyes see everything. My heart feels everything. Knowing so clearly I feel blind. The light feels like darkness and death's not a secret anymore. My eyes are black and without needing a reason why my soul is screaming so quietly. Pain like melted butter, like pleasure, just like happiness. Like a slit wrist crying softly, ecstatic, life blood pouring out. Never mind those promises. Smile when no ones looking, no ones ever really looking. A spirit in the darkness, the other lights are just fading dreams, sweet and lost. Other peoples pale reflections are the ghosts of hope. I just want to touch. I can't feel their caressing hands, my black eyes watch their pretend kisses and love, and my black eyes laugh.

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Re: Black Eyes.
« Reply #1 on: April 05, 2010, 07:14:00 pm »
Since this is your first post, we have no context for this.  So, we have to take it at complete face value.

And the face value reaction is...



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Re: Black Eyes.
« Reply #2 on: April 05, 2010, 07:27:10 pm »
Or...



srsly, though, Or Kill Me is a subforum for rants, which generally have some sort of point. This reads more like poetry (we'll leave aside any criticisms of the poetry itself for now), which would be more appropriately placed in Bring and Brag.

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Re: Black Eyes.
« Reply #3 on: April 05, 2010, 07:32:19 pm »
In addition, because this is either poetry or polemic, I didn't mention that the first sentence isn't actually true.  The eyes do not see everything. 

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Re: Black Eyes.
« Reply #4 on: April 05, 2010, 07:36:30 pm »
In addition, because this is either poetry or polemic, I didn't mention that the first sentence isn't actually true.  The eyes do not see everything. 

Mine do.  But I have had them modified, and then exercised them trying to count the moles on old pics of Bea Arthur.
I met a traveller from an antique land
Who said: Two vast and trunkless legs of stone
Stand in the desert. Near them, on the sand,
Half sunk, shattered underpance lies,
With blown elastic, and exploded back,
Tell that its sculptor well those passions read
Which yet survive, stamped on these lifeless things,
The hand that mocked them and the heart that fed:
And on the pedestal these words appear:
"My name is Doktor Howl, Spag of Spags:
Look on my ass, ye Mighty, and despair!"
Nothing beside remains. Round the decay
Of that colossal wreck, boundless and bare
The lone and level sands stretch far away.

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Re: Black Eyes.
« Reply #5 on: April 05, 2010, 07:36:56 pm »
My eyes see everything. My heart feels everything. Knowing so clearly I feel blind. The light feels like darkness and death's not a secret anymore. My eyes are black and without needing a reason why my soul is screaming so quietly. Pain like melted butter, like pleasure, just like happiness. Like a slit wrist crying softly, ecstatic, life blood pouring out. Never mind those promises. Smile when no ones looking, no ones ever really looking. A spirit in the darkness, the other lights are just fading dreams, sweet and lost. Other peoples pale reflections are the ghosts of hope. I just want to touch. I can't feel their caressing hands, my black eyes watch their pretend kisses and love, and my black eyes laugh.

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Is this a rant, or some kind of emo poetry?
I met a traveller from an antique land
Who said: Two vast and trunkless legs of stone
Stand in the desert. Near them, on the sand,
Half sunk, shattered underpance lies,
With blown elastic, and exploded back,
Tell that its sculptor well those passions read
Which yet survive, stamped on these lifeless things,
The hand that mocked them and the heart that fed:
And on the pedestal these words appear:
"My name is Doktor Howl, Spag of Spags:
Look on my ass, ye Mighty, and despair!"
Nothing beside remains. Round the decay
Of that colossal wreck, boundless and bare
The lone and level sands stretch far away.

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Re: Black Eyes.
« Reply #6 on: April 05, 2010, 10:52:01 pm »
Poetry.
If this is a rant, i don't get it.
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Re: Black Eyes.
« Reply #7 on: April 05, 2010, 11:12:27 pm »
It's good, but it could use more raven's wings.
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Re: Black Eyes.
« Reply #8 on: April 05, 2010, 11:13:13 pm »
It's good, but it could use more raven's wings.

Now I have to shit bats. :crankey:

Anyway, off to Bring and Brag with it.
I met a traveller from an antique land
Who said: Two vast and trunkless legs of stone
Stand in the desert. Near them, on the sand,
Half sunk, shattered underpance lies,
With blown elastic, and exploded back,
Tell that its sculptor well those passions read
Which yet survive, stamped on these lifeless things,
The hand that mocked them and the heart that fed:
And on the pedestal these words appear:
"My name is Doktor Howl, Spag of Spags:
Look on my ass, ye Mighty, and despair!"
Nothing beside remains. Round the decay
Of that colossal wreck, boundless and bare
The lone and level sands stretch far away.

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Re: Black Eyes.
« Reply #9 on: April 07, 2010, 03:35:13 pm »
My eyes are black and without needing a reason why my soul is screaming so quietly.





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Re: Black Eyes.
« Reply #10 on: April 07, 2010, 03:37:22 pm »
Pain like melted butter, like pleasure, just like happiness.




                     THIS IS PAIN.
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Re: Black Eyes.
« Reply #11 on: April 07, 2010, 06:08:08 pm »
*giggles* "this is pain"

I guess it's as close to your guys type of rant as I get. About being  lonely and peoples seemingly fake affection. It all came out in a spew, sort of like a rant.

I'm not sure how to do introductions.. Hi I'm here..heh

I tried to avoid emo overtones but I realize they did leak through a bit, from a certain perspective anyway.
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Re: Black Eyes.
« Reply #12 on: April 09, 2010, 03:01:11 am »
My eyes see everything. My heart feels everything. Knowing so clearly I feel blind. The light feels like darkness and death's not a secret anymore. My eyes are black and without needing a reason why my soul is screaming so quietly. Pain like melted butter, like pleasure, just like happiness. Like a slit wrist crying softly, ecstatic, life blood pouring out. Never mind those promises. Smile when no ones looking, no ones ever really looking. A spirit in the darkness, the other lights are just fading dreams, sweet and lost. Other peoples pale reflections are the ghosts of hope. I just want to touch. I can't feel their caressing hands, my black eyes watch their pretend kisses and love, and my black eyes laugh.

Jesus fucking Christ

What is this shit supposed to be?  I don't get it.

Have you considered drugs?
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Re: Black Eyes.
« Reply #13 on: April 09, 2010, 07:49:14 pm »
It's just sort of a stream of thought. Expression on the run, you know? trying to get stuff out of my head.

I smoke pot, it helps. LoL
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Re: Black Eyes.
« Reply #14 on: April 09, 2010, 08:11:53 pm »
It's just sort of a stream of thought. Expression on the run, you know? trying to get stuff out of my head.

I smoke pot, it helps. LoL

Gaaarrrrrr, please don't be like that.

There's a bunch of folks on this forum that use drugs. A bunch that don't. So this isn't about whether or not you do or do not use drugs.

But please, take responsibility/credit for your own writing.

If you write shit, don't blame pot. If you write brilliant stuff, don't foist the credit off on pot. What you're writing is YOUR WRITING. If you find that pot helps you access the part of yourself that you want to access to write, that's fine. But please don't make this into "lol it was teh potz"

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