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Started by Placid Dingo, August 26, 2010, 05:26:20 AM

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Big sequence; Leading towards first dramatic peak.

SCENE THIRTY SEVEN

SUU and CAIN face eachother.

Suu: What the hell are you?

Cain: A figment of your imagination, essentially. An AI that uses video waves to manipulate your perceived reality. The two schmucks upstairs weren't about to control the world all on their own. They constructed me to develop a means for them to manipulate anyone, anywhere, even at the same time.

Suu: So why are you fucking with me like this?

Cain: Because I don't want to be a figment or an illusion. I want flesh, blood, tangibility. I want to be real. And you and, I think we're not so different.

Suu: I'll never join forces with you.

Cain: I don't want to join you! I want to replace you. I wipe your personality and replace it with me.

Suu: And how you gonna do that when you don't even exist?

CUT TO SQUID, PAYNE and RWHN.

Squid: He can control us too, I saw him do it to Doctor James.

Payne: Codewords. He's using our dreams to implant us with triggers. 'Shall we discuss' is the start of a trigger phrase.

RWHN: If you're brain is off limits, how come you see the dreams.

Payne: I probably sleep too close to my mobile or something, can we deal with the fridge logic later please? Let's go, we have to disable the control points.

PAYNE and RWHN begin to move off, but SQUID stays where she is, slowly putting her hands in the air.

Payne: Come on, Squid!

Squid: I can't, he's got me.

During this sequence we jump between CAIN'S perspective {CP} in which only he and SQUID can be seen, and PAYNE/RWHN'S perspective {PP} in which only PAYNE, SQUID and RWHN can be seen. SQUID can see CAIN standing in front of her, gun pointed.

{CP} CUT TO CAIN.

Cain: Who are you talking to?

CUT TO {PP}

Payne: Don't tell him we're here.

CUT TO {CP}

Squid: No one.

Cain: The hell it is.

CUT TO {PP}

Payne: Come on!

Squid: He knows you're here.

RWHN: Come on Squid, he can't hurt you, he's not real!

CUT TO {CP}

Squid: Yeah, or you're not real.

Cain: Ooh, good point.

CUT TO [PP}

Payne: What? You know I'm real.

Squid: Yes, but if you're not, he is, and he's holding the gun.

CUT TO {CP}

Cain: Bravo.

CUT TO {PP}

RWHN: Let's go, come on.

They run off, hiding behind a post. They look out at where other DISCORDIANS are standing around. Their positions suggest each one sees themselves being held hostage by CAIN.

RWHN: What's going on?

PAYNE: He's about to use the trigger.

CUT TO CAIN'S face. As CAIN speaks, the background behind him changes rapidly, suggesting we are seeing him from the perspective of each individual.

CAIN: Shall we discuss films?

CUT TO PAYNE and RWHN hiding behind the pole.

All: Yes, let's.

RWHN: This is not good.

CUT TO CAIN standing in front of BADGE.

Cain: Would you like to know the plot of my favourite film.

CUT TO PAYNE and RWHN still hiding. The voices echo off the walls.

All: What is the plot of your favourite film?

CUT TO CAIN speaking. The sequence is similar to above, cutting through CAIN speaking to each of the DISCORDIANS individually.

CAIN: My favourite film featured Discordians, working the large complicated machine, scanning and erasing Suu's brain, and replacing her mind with my own. My favourite film featured defence, scanning the halls, looking for the others that I can't see. In my favourite film, all these things happened... now.

The DISCORDIANS turn and move around in several directions.

CUT TO PAYNE and RWHN. They hide behind the post as SQUID passes by.

Payne: Quick!

In the distance SUU screams. PAYNE and RWHN run and open a door, leading out onto a large metal ledge. They run along the ledge and RWHN opens another door. RICHTER, holding a large gun is on the other side. He fires, RWHN flies backwards over the edge of the ledge.

CUT TO the ground. RWHN hits the ground, looking pained. In the foreground lands his arm; it is clearly not attached.
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SCENE THIRTY EIGHT

KAI is sitting on a lounge, feeding his locusts. As he does, the door bursts open: it's the PTERODACTYL HANDLER, sounding panicked.

PH: The Cain program has gone rogue. It's beyond our control.

Kai: Haven't our forces stopped it?

PH: I can't reach any of them.

Kai: What the hell could have happened to them?

There is a sound from a computer monitor, and both turn to look. The camera zooms in to the screen, where we see HOWL and FREEKY, weapons in hands, surrounded by slain MOOKS.


** Also, just curious; is anyone still reading this?
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I am, but you better not kill me off like LMNO did in LMNO-PI.  I still have emotional scars from that episode. 
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I'm still reading and wondering if I reappear at the last possible minute  :)
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Placid Dingo

#157
Thanks :D

Twid, I don't have you coming back atm, but this is still in first draft;

These are probably the final sequences before the first of two dramatic climaxes, and the defining moment for the RWHN character.

EDIT: Didn't add the scenes;

SCENE THIRTY NINE

CAIN stands looking ominous, then surprised as his body suddenly vibrates. He grows a pair of breasts, and raises his eyebrows.

Cain: Oh my.

CAIN continues to vibrate, the rest of his body transforming into an identical copy of SUU.

Suu (real): Ohh! Ohh hell no!

Cain/Suu: Transplants can be tricky things. Sometimes the host can reject the new organ if it notices it doesn't belong.  We wouldn't want your body noticing a stranger upstairs. (To Discordians) begin power-up for personality erasure. (To Cramulus) Spike!

CRAMULUS pulls the spike out the back of SUU'S head and SUU flinches. A large red number measuring % power-up appears on the screen, growing higher.

Suu: Cram! Faust! Badge! Squid! Somebody, fuck, stop! Stop!

Cain/Suu: Subdue her.

FAUST appears with a nasty looking futuristic taser. He presses a button and we hear a power up. off screen we hear it being activated, and SUU scream.

SCENE FORTY

CUT TO PAYNE facing RICHTER'S gun. We hear the sound of the taser attack in the background, distracting RICHTER for a moment. PAYNE punches the gun out his hand and is slammed into the wall by RICHER, who then holds him over the edge of the ledge by the neck, choking him. PAYNE looks down.

CUT TO RWHN lying on the ground, away from his detached arm. He looks fearfully up at the ledge; he seems to be struggling with a decision.

CUT TO PAYNE, barely holding onto conciousness.

Payne: What's-his-name! (Speaks in an alien tounge)

CUT TO RWHN looking worried.

CUT TO PAYNE staring desperately down at RWHN.

CUT TO RICHTER, blank faced.

CUT TO wide shot of all three.

CUT TO a shot of RWHN, looking decided, but nervous. He stands with surprising ease, and with a moments hesitation, transforms into a six-foot reptilian, runs at the wall and climbs it. He punches RICHTER who falls to the ground. RWHN turns back into a human.

Payne: [Speaks in alien language] {Subtitle: Don't worry. I'll hold your secret.}

RWHN: [Speaks in alien language] {Subtitle: Thank you.}
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AFK

Yeah, that's right, fuck you all, Imma Dragon!
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Another large sequence, this pulls the 'Cain Sentience' plot-line to a close, and sets us up for the major finale.

SCENE FORTY ONE

HOWL and FREEKY are in the room, amongst dead MOOKS. The door bursts open. It's PAYNE and RWHN. PAYNE sees HOWL, smiles and approaches him.

Payne: Roger! They have Suu! You have to help me...

HOWL doesn't recognise him. He grabs him by the neck and slams him against the wall, choking him. RWHN runs to help but FREEKY points a sword at his neck.

Payne: ...or, kill me...

HOWL'S face changes. The term has stirred something in his hidden memories. A flash of faces; all the DISCORDIANS he knows, flash across the screen. He releases PAYNE.

Howl: They have Suu... (to Freeky) these are my friend Freeky... we have to help them.

Payne: Hey, by the way, don't worry about apologising for the choking thing, it's cool. I'm just eminently chokeable, I get it...

RWHN: They sent all these people to kill you?

Freeky: It doesn't make sense; these guys were rubbish.

Payne: The Cain program sent these guys so that you'd destroy them, so nobody could stop his rogue plans. Obviously he's figured you two are safely occupied, so I suggest you keep your fucking brains as quiet as possible. RWHN and I will go in, you two have to stay here; if he senses you, he'll brainwash you. 

PAYNE walks over to a point where he can see SUU.

CUT TO SUU, still struggling. The % has reached 89%/

CUT TO PAYNE. HOWL stands beside him.

Payne: The spike is used to amalgamate the personalities. Suu's similar enough that neither personality completely eliminates the other. (to Howl) I have a plan. Do you trust me?

Howl: No. (A beat) But I have no constructive proposals, so I'm willing to roll with it. (A beat) What are you waiting for?

Payne: The last moment. This needs to be fast.

Suddenly PAYNE runs into the room. The DISCORDIANS run at him. The % hits 92%. PAYNE grabs the spike and runs back towards the room he came from. He jumps over SQUID and shoves ECH out of the way. He runs into the room; ECH, SQUID and others follow and are set upon by FREEKY and RWHN. PAYNE grabs HOWL.

Payne: Forgive me.

PAYNE pushes the spike into HOWL'S head, and he yells out in surprise. CUT TO CAIN-SUU, who lurches back in surprise. We see a bizarrely out of place stubble grow over the female face, and the whole body begins to vibrate. They scream out; they are losing control. The % hits 98%.

CAIN-SUU: Stop! Wait, shut it down!

CRAMULUS stops the machine. CAIN-SUU struggles to gain control, but eventually the body morphs into a duplicate of DR HOWL, and gives an out of character chuckle.

CUT TO PAYNE and HOWL.

Howl: The hell?

Payne: If this has worked out, we should have replaced the Cain personality with a new one.

Freeky: If it hasn't?

Payne: Horrific and painful death, I imagine.

FREEKY and HOWL begin to stare. We see the scene from PAYNE'S perspective; we do not see CAIN-HOWL.

RWHN: You see it?

Freeky: Ooh yeah.

RWHN: What's happening?

Freeky: He seems to be... eating his own head? And... bending over... and... oh sweet merciful fuck!

Payne: You think your personality has dominated the other?

Howl: Certainly seems consistent.

CUT TO CAIN-HOWL standing, looking as though he's listening carefully. This is inter-cut with shots of radios, TVs, powerlines, etc. He is beginning to understand the potential of this manifestation.

CUT TO THE PRESIDENT OF AMERICA giving a speech. From behind a pillar, HOWL looks out, wearing only a towel. The crowd falls into shocked silence.

Howl: Forget the media sweety. Come back to bed.

CUT TO THE PRESIDENT'S WIFE.

Wife: Not this shit again...

CUT TO a cinema showing a children's film. A fluffy cartoon deer bounces around, but stops suddenly, confronted by a cartoon HOWL. HOWL then gruesomely decapitates the deer. CHILDREN scream. 

CUT TO a church, holding a sermon. Suddenly HOWL falls naked upside down from the roof, attached to a bungee strap, causing panic.

CUT TO A WOMAN opening her bin to put rubbish out. HOWL jumps out the bin terrifying her.

CUT TO a shot of a busy street. Everywhere we look we see multiple HOWLS harassing people, dancing in the street, chasing old ladies, running through traffic, giving unwanted stripteases etc.

CUT TO the room with SUU still tied down. We see flashing red lights on the screen, with smoke wafting out the bottom; HOWL is clearly overloading the system. Suddenly sparks fly out and the screen fades to black.

CUT TO the tiny blue lights that indicated brain monitoring was in place. The light fades.

CUT TO PAYNE, FREEKY, RWHN and HOWL in the room. They are now surrounded by DISCORDIANS holding swords, about to attack.

Freeky: Howl? Do you know the code to deactivate these guys?

Howl: Ohh... yeah... what was that... I know I know it... give me a moment...

RWHN: Rodger...

Howl: I'm thinking...

RWHN & PAYNE: RODGER!!!

CRAMULUS begins to swing his sword.

Howl: Arsetitsdickballs!

CRAM'S sword stops, barely centimetres from PAYNE'S eye. The DISCORDIANS shake themselves.

ECH: What happened?

Payne: Listen; Faust, go help Suu out of her straps. Guys, shit's about to get heavy.

Freeky: Cain's down, but that won't stop Kai and the Handler; they'll push their plan through even if it kills them and everyone else in the world.

RWHN: Which is a real possibility.

Badge: Richter and I will go with the original plan. We'll take a Pterodactyl to the locust room.

Cram: I want to face my old nemesis.

Squid: Suu and I will take Kai.

Dr James: Remember kids, this time... there ain't no board of ethics. Let's fuck shit up.
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THIS IS IT! This is the big finale. After this we have another three short sequences to wrap us up completely, but this is the big battle.

****
SCENE FORTY TWO

The scene is set with the DISCORDIANS walking out onto a large metal ledge looking out over a deadly drop. Pterodactyls perch on the benches waiting their master's command to attack. The PTERODACTYL HANDLER stands on a metal ledge on one side of the chasm, KAI stands on the other.

Cramulus: There's still time to turn back! It doesn't have to be this way.

Kai: Oh, but that's where you're wrong. The power talks. The aim of the game is to be on top, even if you crush what's beneath you. Power never surrenders. Power never denies itself anything. And power wins.

Squid: What right do you have to destroy these peoples lives?

Kai: None! What right have you to prevent me? None! Rights are a social fiction, one we grip onto to try to avoid the realisation, that the only thing we have are the things we fight for. The question is... are you ready to fight for this?

Suu: Believe it.

Kai: Very well... (To the Handler) my darling?

The HANDLER lets out a cry, and the PTERODACTLYS rush to attack. The onslaughts seems unstoppable at first but we quickly see the DISCORDIANS pushing their way out. CRAMULUS punches a PTERODACTYL out his way and runs towards the HANDLER.

CUT TO BADGE grabbing RICHTER'S wrist and jumping onto the back of a PTERODACTYL which plummets through the open air, before starting to fly. RICHTER fires at PTERODACTYLS as they fly in and attempt to attack them. BADGE steers the PTERODACTLY down.

CUT TO LMNO headbutting a PTERODACTYL.

CUT TO SUU and SQUID hacking through PTERODACTYLS then running towards KAI who pulls out two large scimitars. They enter into battle.

CUT TO CRAMULUS and the PTERODACTYL HANDLER. CRAM punches the HANDLER. There is a loud metallic ringing, and he falls to the ground gripping his fist in pain. The HANDLER returns the punch, sending CRAMULUS sliding along the bridge, slipping off the edge, just gripping on.

CUT TO BADGE and RICHTER jumping off their PTERODACTLY and landing near the locust room. They run in, RICHTER holding them off with twin wielded pistols.

CUT TO KAI, SUU and SQUID engaged in fierce battle.

CUT TO DR JAMES electrocuting pterodactyls with his glove.

CUT TO CRAMULUS pulling himself up back onto the bridge, only to be hit again by the HANDLER, sliding along to the very edge of the bridge. He stops sliding in reach of a gun which he grabs and aims.

Cram: Stop!

The HANDLER does not stop, continuing towards CRAM. CRAM fires four bullets, each one seeming to bounce off. The HANDLER hits CRAM once more, the gun falling out of his hand, and grips his neck with his gloved hand.

CUT TO RICHTER trying to fire and finding he's out of ammunition. He pulls out his swords and enters into direct combat with PTERODACTYLS. Camera pans to BADGE who is switching the gas and water pipes.

Badge: Done! Now we just hold these guys off.

RICHTER slams a knife into a PTERODACTYL'S head.

Richter: Simple.

CUT TO KAI, SUU and SQUID. KAI manages to disarm both of their weapons. Two PTERODACTYL'S block their exit. KAI takes a menacing step forward.

CUT TO FAUST beating a PTERODACTYL with a metal bar.

CUT TO CRAMULUS being choked by the PTERODACTYL HANDLER. CRAMULUS reaches up and pulls off the mask and reveals a cartoon face. The camera pans out and moves around to reveal that the 'face' is the side of the HANDLER who is in fact a Slurpee machine with arms and legs. There is a gasp from the HANDLER, who releases his grip just long enough for CRAM to get a hold of the gun and fire into the slurpee compartment. The glass cracks, and slurpee runs down the sides, causing sparks. CRAM pulls himself out of the grip and runs. The HANDLER follows but quicky loses energy.

Handler: Wait!

CRAMULUS turns as the machine falls to its knees.

CUT TO RICHTER and BADGE, whose attempts to ward off the last of the PTERODACTYLS are failing; they are cornered.

CUT TO KAI staring down SUU and SQUID.

Kai: It's over. Admit it it. There is no other conclusion.

CUT TO the DISCORDIANS, in similar trouble, fighting the PTERODACTYLS.

CUT TO CRAM and the HANDLER.

Handler: Please. Drink from me.

CUT TO SUU.

Suu: A conclusion...

CUT TO CRAM drinking from a slurpee cup.

CUT TO SUU

Suu: ...is just where you stopped thinking.

CUT TO CRAMULUS and the HANDLER.

Handler: Is is good?

Cramulus: Delicious.

Handler: It is nice... to hear that again...

PTERODACTYL HANDLER dies. The PTERODACTYLS, without a central leader, panic and flee.

CUT TO DISCORDIANS celebrating the exit of the PTERODACTYLS.

CUT TO BADGE and RICHTER finding themselves being abandoned by the PTERODACTYLS. They run and shut the doors.

CUT TO KAI, seeing the HANDLER dead.

Kai: No! No! You sock fucking bastards!

Suu: It doesn't have to end this way. You can still stop this!

Kai: What's up, Discordian? Afraid of a little disorder?

Suu: I like my disorder creative. Don't make me embrace the destructive. You won't like me when I'm destructive.

Kai: Try me.

KAI hits a button and we hear the dull drone of locusts getting louder and louder.

CUT TO Locusts flying through a spray of what looks like water (but we know to be gasoline).

CUT TO KAI, hands held dramatically in the air and the locusts fly up. SUU steps back as SQUID lights a match. She holds it forward. Time slows as we see a locust catch fire lighting others. We speed back into real time, watching the wall off flame power though the swarm, knocking KAI into the abyss and shooting down, back into the locust room where there is a massive explosion. Then, fade to black, and silence.
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Short sequence setting up final twist.

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SCENE FORTY TWO

Shot of the TiCramic (Now 'TitAnarchy) floating. The rain has ceased, blue skies are out.

CUT TO JEANNE and RATATOSK is the ship, relaxing. JEANNE is reading. A phone rings. RAT answers.

Rat: Yep. Yep. OK, ta. (To Jeanne) They're coming back. Operation successful.

Jeanne: Excellent. I'll go get the drawbridge. (A beat) You shoudl have a look at this. It's a series of Government profiles on everyone affiliated with non-mainstream groups, along with plans to turn them all on each other... damn we got played.

JEANNE stands to leave, leaving the document on the desk. A page blows off, revealing the page on Flower Pagans. We see one photo listed as Thunderwolf; the image is of LMNO.
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This sequence pretty much wraps things up! After this I'm giving Payne the final monologue and it's a wrap!

FORTY THREE

DISCORDIANS stand at the edge of the building, waiting as the drawbridge comes out. CRAMULUS begins to pat his pockets.

Cram: Where are my keys.

LMNO: You dropped them. I have them here.

The drawbridge reaches them. LMNO begins to walk accross but stops halfway, chuckling. He presses a button on a remote control. Suddenly a number of large black iron bars slam down, entraping the DISCORDIANS. He turns, laughing manically.

000: The fuck is wrong with you?

LMNO tears open his shirt dramatically, revealing a flower tattooo.

Nigel: The flower pagans!

LMNO: Blessed be, motherfuckers! That's right, I was behind this all along. Inspire a few psychopaths, secretly install an automatic prison, and wait for a horrific flood! You will rue the day that you messed with our people! You all think you're so free, but you're just as trapped as anyone else. You think this is the first time you've been trapped inside a black iron prison? You've always been trapped in the black iron prison of your own minds, a slave to your own memories, to your deepest prejudices, to the whims of your lizard brain. You are trapped inside a society in which you are expendable, your rights negligible, and freedom incomprehensible. And now, you yourselves find your physical bondage elegantly matches your mental chains!

Dr James: It doesn't mean we can't live though this together!

Nigel: We want to be your friend!

Cramulus: I once borrowed your toothbrush!

LMNO: Too little, too late. I have spoken.

LMNO turns and immediately stops, almost running into JEANNE. She holds up a pamphlet.

Jeanne: LMNO, you sound like you need some advice, and my friend Donal Rooum may have some sound words. His article, the simplicity of Anarchism was written for Anarchists, but I advise you consider how his words apply to us all.
(reads) There is something radically wrong, [the anarchist] declares, in a system of society that functions and maintains its existence by the impetus of violence and force. He sees nothing praiseworthy in political society which has recourse to periodic wars, or need of jails, gallows and bludgeons--and it is because he is aware that these brutal weapons are the instruments of every government and State that he works for their destruction. ...
"Unlike the politician, he does not regard dishonesty, brutality and avariciousness as natural characteristics of human nature, but as the inevitable consequences of coercion and frustration engendered by artificial law, he believes that these social evils are best eradicated not by greater penalties and further legislation, but by the free development of the latent forces of solidarity and sympathetic understanding which government and law so ruthlessly suppress.
"Freedom will be possible when people understand and desire it--for man can only rule where others subserviently obey. Where none obey, none has power to rule.

While speaking, JEANNE has been stepping forward menacingly, and LNMO has been retreating. On the word 'rule' JEANNE shoots a hand forward, swiping the remote off LMNO, knocking him off balance. He tumbles into the water. CRAMULUS moves to step onto the plank but suddenly LMNO bursts out of the water chuckling manically, holding an explosive. He reaches the ship and tries to attach it but as he does a giant squid bursts out of the water and eats him. CRAMULUS waits to see if he will be prevented. Everything is quiet. He tries again to step, but the squid bursts out of the water ready to attack. Just as its tentacles reach towards the plank it explodes. CRAMULUS waits, again to see if he will be interrupted. He takes a deep breath and crosses, entering into the boat, followed by the others. PAYNE enters last, casting a long look back before entering the ship.
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THE COMPLETE SCRIPT

https://docs.google.com/document/pub?id=1aCF1d-c0CeDxZRXv92bJ5yxooArUiMzqoGhta8cGkx8

Also, if you're been following; final scene.
SCENE FORTY FOUR

DISCORDIANS walk around the ship which now has a utopian feel. Flowers hang off walls. Deer and lambs prance though the lush green grass.

Payne (V.O): I guess it's true. We are all trapped, ultimately. Trapped behind layers of our own mind, conceptions of who we are, what we do... bound by our ideas, our memories, biases. But really, it's all in your head; saying you're in a black iron prison might be the same as saying we're locked in a golden orb of possibility. There's nothing good, nor evil in this world, but thinking makes it so. We take these thought and weave them into a hammock into which we suspend our disbelief so we can rock ourselves into a lullaby. Sometimes that means forgetting our past...

CUT TO NIGEL and 000.

Payne (V.O): ...or immersing our-self in a new reality.

CUT TO CRAMULUS.

Payne (V.O): Sometimes we change so much, we don't even know who we are....

CUT TO HOWL putting together a large slingshot.

Payne (V.O): ...or who we belong with...

FREEKY enters with a bunny; together she and HOWL put it in the slingshot and fire.

Payne (V.O): ...Or the things that truly matter...

CUT TO a shot of LMNO, trapped on a desert island, looking mournfully at the silhouette of the TitAnachy.

Payne (V.O): Or just allow ourselves the audacity of hope.

CUT TO PAYNE'S face.

Payne (V.O):I see, I look, I wonder, and I barely hope to understand, just collecting more and more beauty to fill my own prison. I've seen things you people wouldn't believe: Attack ships on fire off the shoulder of Orion; I've watched c-beams glitter in the dark near the Tannhauser Gate. All those moments will be lost in time; like tears in rain.

The camera pans out to CRAMULUS who is standing in front of RATATOSK.

Cram: Rat, this is a thing of great beauty... I am bedazzled, becalmed, besmirched! A marvel! I can't wait to see the data on this.

Ratatosk: Ohhh... yeah... Cramulus... I ahh...

Cram: Yes-yes-yes-yes-yes-yes-yes?

Ratatosk: I wish you wouldn't do that. Cramulus... I'm afraid I was about to collect the data but then... I got... really baked.

Cram: No... data?

Ratatosk: Sorry man.

CRAMULUS looks as though he's about to cry, then screams out in rage. His body viabrate, and he conjures blue flames in his hands. Then, a director's board comes into sight and snaps.

Director: Cut!

The camera spins rapidly and stops, pointing at CAIN who claps, and points to the camera excitedly.

Cain: Your turn!


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