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Started by Rupert Giles, July 28, 2004, 08:07:02 PM

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Has-been or the next big thing?

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Rupert Giles

July 28, 2004, 08:07:02 PM
Please, don't make me go.
I don't think I wanna know.
But what you see inside
is all I've tried to hide.

You can't see me.
You can't hear me.
You've shut me out.
Turned about.
Walked on ahead.
Left me for dead.
Ignored my pleas.
You must be
so happy without me.

When we first met
I would have bet
You'd never has been
a very good friend.

A sorority girl.
You hair in curls.
Your car was bought
by your rich mom'n'pop.

You dress the same
as all the other dames
You and your sisters alone
could be mistaken for clones.

And what was I?
Just some dumb guy.
Who didn't care what he wore
I got what was in store.

For me.
And now you can...
see.

But...

You can't see me.
You can't hear me.
You've shut me out.
Turned about.
Walked on ahead.
Left me for dead.
Ignored my pleas.
You must be
so happy without me.

On our first date.
You were late.
We stayed out till dawn.
I passed out at home.

But I wasn't the kind of guy
That you were supposed to find.

The other girls
put it to a vote
They cast the dice
You gave up the ghost.

They told you that it was
them or me.
They...
made you see.

But...

You can't see me.
You can't hear me.
You've shut me out.
Turned about.
Walked on ahead.
Left me for dead.
Ignored my pleas.
You must be
so happy without me.

You must be
So Happy...

Really, Truely
happy.

Without...
me...

Rupert Giles

#2
July 29, 2004, 04:49:02 AM
Quote from: HotsumaPoetry.Sucks.

*Cries*

MescalineBanana

#3
July 29, 2004, 06:18:43 AM
As soon as I saw it was poetry my mind went blank and my eyes unfocused.  Sorry, but I just don't have the attention span for that dribble you call "Poetry."  I'm sure it would be delightful if I read it.
Omnia quia sunt, lumina sunt.

Rupert Giles

#4
July 29, 2004, 06:22:09 AM
Quote from: MescalineBananaAs soon as I saw it was poetry my mind went blank and my eyes unfocused.  Sorry, but I just don't have the attention span for that dribble you call "Poetry."  I'm sure it would be delightful if I read it.

*Bows*  Domo.

The Good Reverend Roger

#5
July 29, 2004, 07:14:35 AM
Quote from: HotsumaPoetry.Sucks.

Never read Kipling, eh?
" It's just that Depeche Mode were a bunch of optimistic loveburgers."
- TGRR, shaming himself forever, 7/8/2017

"Billy, when I say that ethics is our number one priority and safety is also our number one priority, you should take that to mean exactly what I said. Also quality. That's our number one priority as well. Don't look at me that way, you're in the corporate world now and this is how it works."
- TGRR, raising the bar at work.

Wishfarple

#6
July 29, 2004, 01:15:11 PM
Quote from: HotsumaPoetry.Sucks.

Ooh, you forgot the "Most. " before that.  

Most everything sucks, it's true.  

The problem with poetry is that when it sucks, brother, it sucks BAD.  

Thing is, when it's good, it's sublime.  Many people don't bother learning how to appreciate (or even find) the good stuff, so many people mistake the stuff they see teenagers sticking in their livejournals or ripping off song lyrics for poetry, and assume it's representative.  That's like hearing your grade-school band and never wanting to hear the London Philharmonic.
His Right Most Honorable Super Hella Reverend Llama Wishfart Rinpoche of the Church of Ed Gein (Deceased),
Temple of Cleveland

~~~~Closed~~~~

#7
July 30, 2004, 01:17:53 AM
"Good poetry" is an oxymoron.

Rupert Giles

#8
July 30, 2004, 06:23:23 AM
Kind of like, "Elderly Ninja?"

The Good Reverend Roger

#9
July 30, 2004, 06:34:13 AM
Quote from: Hotsuma"Good poetry" is an oxymoron.

I disagree.

You don't like Kipling?  Sandberg?  That brain-damaged freak Samuel Coleridge Taylor?  Read HIS stuff...lots of greyfaces would move to make room on the bus for THAT drug fiend.
" It's just that Depeche Mode were a bunch of optimistic loveburgers."
- TGRR, shaming himself forever, 7/8/2017

"Billy, when I say that ethics is our number one priority and safety is also our number one priority, you should take that to mean exactly what I said. Also quality. That's our number one priority as well. Don't look at me that way, you're in the corporate world now and this is how it works."
- TGRR, raising the bar at work.

~~~~Closed~~~~

#10
July 30, 2004, 06:42:21 AM
Quote from: The Good Reverend Roger
I disagree.

Then your wrong.

Rupert Giles

#11
July 30, 2004, 06:43:02 AM
Quote from: The Good Reverend Roger
Quote from: Hotsuma"Good poetry" is an oxymoron.

I disagree.

You don't like Kipling?  Sandberg?  That brain-damaged freak Samuel Coleridge Taylor?  Read HIS stuff...lots of greyfaces would move to make room on the bus for THAT drug fiend.

Hey, Rime of the Ancient Mariner is the BOMB.

'And through the drifts the snowy clifts
did cast a dismal sheen:
Nor shapes of men nor beast we ken --
The Ice was all between.'

...

'About, about in reel and rout
the deaths fires danced at night.
And the water like a witches oils
Burnt green and blue and white.'

...

'They groaned, they stirred, they all uprose
Nor spake, nor moved their eyes;
It had been strange, even in a dream,
to have seen those dead men rise.'

...

'Water, water, everywhere.
And not a drop to drink.
Water, water, everywhere.
And all the boards did shrink.'

I think I can best describe the feeling that I get from reading that work by quoting from the Sandman.

Quote from: William ShakespereGod's Wounds!  If only I could write like you!

In Faustus where you wrote-- "To god!  He loves thee not!  The god thou servest is thine own appetite, wherein is fixed teh love of Beelzebub."

"To Him I'll build an altar and a church, and offer lukewarm blood of new-born babies."

It chills my blood.

The Good Reverend Roger

#12
July 30, 2004, 06:50:56 AM
Quote from: Hotsuma
Quote from: The Good Reverend Roger
I disagree.

Then your wrong.

"You're".

You're welcome.
" It's just that Depeche Mode were a bunch of optimistic loveburgers."
- TGRR, shaming himself forever, 7/8/2017

"Billy, when I say that ethics is our number one priority and safety is also our number one priority, you should take that to mean exactly what I said. Also quality. That's our number one priority as well. Don't look at me that way, you're in the corporate world now and this is how it works."
- TGRR, raising the bar at work.

The Good Reverend Roger

#13
July 30, 2004, 06:51:34 AM
Quote from: Compositus Confusio
Quote from: The Good Reverend Roger
Quote from: Hotsuma"Good poetry" is an oxymoron.

I disagree.

You don't like Kipling?  Sandberg?  That brain-damaged freak Samuel Coleridge Taylor?  Read HIS stuff...lots of greyfaces would move to make room on the bus for THAT drug fiend.

Hey, Rime of the Ancient Mariner is the BOMB.

'And through the drifts the snowy clifts
did cast a dismal sheen:
Nor shapes of men nor beast we ken --
The Ice was all between.'

...

'About, about in reel and rout
the deaths fires danced at night.
And the water like a witches oils
Burnt green and blue and white.'

...

'They groaned, they stirred, they all uprose
Nor spake, nor moved their eyes;
It had been strange, even in a dream,
to have seen those dead men rise.'

...

'Water, water, everywhere.
And not a drop to drink.
Water, water, everywhere.
And all the boards did shrink.'

I think I can best describe the feeling that I get from reading that work by quoting from the Sandman.

Quote from: William ShakespereGod's Wounds!  If only I could write like you!

In Faustus where you wrote-- "To god!  He loves thee not!  The god thou servest is thine own appetite, wherein is fixed teh love of Beelzebub."

"To Him I'll build an altar and a church, and offer lukewarm blood of new-born babies."

It chills my blood.

Try Taylor's Xanadu.

BRAIN DAMAGE.
" It's just that Depeche Mode were a bunch of optimistic loveburgers."
- TGRR, shaming himself forever, 7/8/2017

"Billy, when I say that ethics is our number one priority and safety is also our number one priority, you should take that to mean exactly what I said. Also quality. That's our number one priority as well. Don't look at me that way, you're in the corporate world now and this is how it works."
- TGRR, raising the bar at work.
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