GREAT critique, Ratatosk.
Yea, my book report is here:http://www.principiadiscordia.com/forum/index.php?topic=11440.0
that was my 50th post. =) A lot of new posters have made basically the same comments - some good stuff in there, but it lacks the proper packaging to be effective.
We had a several week long discussion about whether or not 'Black Iron Prison' is the correct metaphor. Eventually we got tired of talking about it. The same thing is happening with the "age of aftermath" magazine project - there's a lot of good thought, but we seem to lack the leadership and momentum to push it into what we want it to be.
The BIP pamphlet was written before I was here, but I get the impression that it was basically a collection of rants and sermons written around the same time period. That's why there's no unified direction. At the time there was a lot of energy towards writing another edition of the Principia, but the motion swung towards exploring the black iron prison metaphor. A lot of the "core discordian" stuff fell out of the project's scope (anyone who was around at the time - please clarify / correct me).
I'm still in favor of working towards a BIP 2.0 pamphlet - one in which we take what's good about this one and whittle it into something akin to the PD. I also feel it could use some cutup art and humor.
I encourage you to get an account on the blackironprison.com wiki (a number of people here can hook you up with one) and propose some changes to the articles you think could use some work. The most effective way to see progress seems to be to throw a snowball and hope it turns into an avalanche.